So, delete the throwing up sentence at the end? That's an easy tweak, lol.
How's that look?
So, delete the throwing up sentence at the end? That's an easy tweak, lol.
How's that look?
Last edited by Yvonne; 05-05-2018 at 10:57 AM.
So I’m cutting that branch off the cherry tree.
Singing this will be my victory.
Then I, I see them coming after me.
And they’re following me across the sea.
And now they’re stinging my friends and my family.
And I, I don’t know why this is happening.
~ Thrice, Black Honey.
Looks good!
Another post filled with angst amd zero setting coming up!
Anyone want to write a thread with Hanuh? I might start an open thread in Stonevale or something.
Replied, Yvonne! Wow, that post was dramatic...
"I can't be proud of anything. I am ashamed of everything."
"I gave my heart, my allegiance, all my energy for this and got nothing but ashes in return. What on earth did I do to deserve being chewed and spit out like this? Time and time again, it's all the same."
Felicity Playlist.
Such awesome Fel. Here's the point where we get the character development you asked for at the start of this thread, 9 pages ago, haha. We've come a long way. I knew we could do it! *high five from a dwarf?*
That poor Drakari service assistant, dude, he be having a bad day.
So I’m cutting that branch off the cherry tree.
Singing this will be my victory.
Then I, I see them coming after me.
And they’re following me across the sea.
And now they’re stinging my friends and my family.
And I, I don’t know why this is happening.
~ Thrice, Black Honey.
Poor drakari! xD Poor little fellow!
Yes! Character development! It leaves a window for Yvonne's development too! She now knows Felicity is pretty much the living vessel of an uncontrollable magical power, and the very paranoia that had her screaming at that Fae guide at the beginning may very well act up again. I'm so pumped for the rest of this thread!
"I can't be proud of anything. I am ashamed of everything."
"I gave my heart, my allegiance, all my energy for this and got nothing but ashes in return. What on earth did I do to deserve being chewed and spit out like this? Time and time again, it's all the same."
Felicity Playlist.
It's like 5:39am here but I've gotta get outta bed and write the next post. Yvonne's inner turmoil over this be threatening ta tear me apart, lol.
So I’m cutting that branch off the cherry tree.
Singing this will be my victory.
Then I, I see them coming after me.
And they’re following me across the sea.
And now they’re stinging my friends and my family.
And I, I don’t know why this is happening.
~ Thrice, Black Honey.
Wow, your post was amazing! Blew me away! I loved it!
And I replied! Hope the mild bunnying is okay. Yvonne wins xD And Felicity zonked out.
"I can't be proud of anything. I am ashamed of everything."
"I gave my heart, my allegiance, all my energy for this and got nothing but ashes in return. What on earth did I do to deserve being chewed and spit out like this? Time and time again, it's all the same."
Felicity Playlist.
Teehee, yer, kinda blew myself away with that one. Like I said, had ta exorcise it all early this morning. It had ta be written.
I don't mind the barely-bunnying. It adds effect.
I'm tentative to continue the thread much further. We should finish on a high note, hey? What should I do ta round it out? Could have the drakari help Yvonne carry Felicity to the outskirts of Donnalaich, make a little camp and makeshift bed to help Fel eat and recover. I'm sure we could improvise a stretcher, hehe. Unless you had a better finale?
So I’m cutting that branch off the cherry tree.
Singing this will be my victory.
Then I, I see them coming after me.
And they’re following me across the sea.
And now they’re stinging my friends and my family.
And I, I don’t know why this is happening.
~ Thrice, Black Honey.
It looks awesome! Want to submit it for judgement now? Would you prefer workshop or moderator judgement? I think I have the AP to submit it for a full judgement and really, this thread is good enough for one! Up to you
"I can't be proud of anything. I am ashamed of everything."
"I gave my heart, my allegiance, all my energy for this and got nothing but ashes in return. What on earth did I do to deserve being chewed and spit out like this? Time and time again, it's all the same."
Felicity Playlist.
Yea, I'm keen to see how these full judgements go down. I'm really proud of what we accomplished, and I'd like to know anything a moderator can teach me to make the next one even better.
Go for it dear and great work by the way. We make a wicked pair.
So I’m cutting that branch off the cherry tree.
Singing this will be my victory.
Then I, I see them coming after me.
And they’re following me across the sea.
And now they’re stinging my friends and my family.
And I, I don’t know why this is happening.
~ Thrice, Black Honey.
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