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    235

    Name
    Avin Painbringer
    Age
    18 (when died)
    Race
    Undead Kenku
    Gender
    Male
    Location
    Corone

    Avin Level 1

    If over limit am willing to lock/limit.

    Name: Avin Tsakaka
    Goes by: Avin Painbringer
    Height: 5ft exactly
    Weight: 100 pounds
    Race: Undead Kenku
    Age: 18 when died
    Profession: Ronin, servant of Vindrexis

    Appearance:

    Appearance (general):

    Copied from Avis' profile.

    Kenku are a race of wingless, bird-like bipedal beings, taking the form of corvids - that being the crow family. Kenku stand at roughly 5ft to the head, and have a feathered body that covers most of their body, ending at the wrists and ankles. Their heads are those of birds, with long, often sharp beaks and black beady eyes. Their arms are formed much like that of a human, except ending in claws. Their legs also are built something like a bird, with a knee, then a lower joint for what would be the ankle and ending in a four clawed foot (one behind, three in front), essentially making them walk on thier toes, as any bird does. Below where the feathers end, at wrists and ankles, the skin black scaly form. They also have a short or medium size tail, with long tail feathers there that are usual stiff and the whole form is fan-shaped. Kenku also tend to be entirely black in colour, but there are variations of this based on the various corvids. White patches can appear, as can deep emerald from a magpie, indigo, greys and very dark violet. The most common colour change is on the head in form of a 'hood'. Kenku are light, owing to the partially hollow nature of their bones, owed from when they were birds, by their lore, and live shorter lives than the usual humanoid. They tend to die at age 40 or 50 and are considered mature when they reach 13 and can marry.

    See kenku wiki page for more info.

    Appearance Avin Specific:

    Avin as a kenku in life was the average size with the muscle and stature of a warrior, yet slight. Now, undead, he still retains the build yet his colour has changed. His feathers, scales and beak have been bleached to a light grey colour. His feathers themselves, although still retaining a shine, have become less full and wholesome. Three of his long, pale, bone-coloured claws have cracks in them. His eyes are black pits that have remained roughly the same, even keeping with his very distinctive rose speck in his right eye. He wears a long and ripped cloak, made from a rough cloth, and also a etchu-fundoshi, a form of loin cloth with an apron element at the front. This is also joined by a rough leather jerkin at times of battle, that hands loose around him. He can usually be found carrying a naginata - an Akasiman spear.

    History:

    Avin was born along with his twin brother Akka to Tsu, a high ranking senshi (warrior) and a blacksmith's daughter called Cassis, from the flock of the Rook. At that time the two had just been married. Avin had a loved and precious childhood, growing up with good hearty bread, made by his mother's well-skilled hand and weaponry training from his father. He showed skill in the naginata, whilst his brother showed still in the katana. Their childhood was peaceful - until their flock was sent into war against the Crow flock.

    It was a matter of misunderstanding of land claimancy. The Rook clan had sent a platoon into the area of land, which sparked tensions that already existed. The Rook shogun ordered a compulsory conscription and the twin boys, just eleven at the time, were quickly called to the army. They were trained fast along with few others and assigned to a newly made platoon. However, the boys were ill prepared for their orders. When they had an opportunity to kill or capture the Crow princess they refused.

    The Rook Shogun, full of anger, wanted to kill them. However Tsu, their father, because of his high standing, managed to persuade the Shogun to just make them kegareta - that is, classless, outwith the protection of any Shogun. The boys took the opportunity and lived outside the safety of flock lands for six months, kept alive with help from Tsu and Cassis. They survived together and learnt great skill.

    The war ended with the engagement of the Crow princess to the Rook Shogun heir. However, for the Tsakakas their trouble had just begun. A mistake meant that Tsu was away from his guard post one night for a short while, and that same night the Shogun heir was poisoned. The whole family, with an infant daughter, was sent into kegareta.

    For seven years following they strived to survive. With Cassis’ skill in baking and the men's skill in fighting they found use and a life. They joined the company known as the 'Watchers With No Master’. The twins served as ronin mercenaries for a while, and it was during one of their jobs that they got close to a village. In the village was a guard who had been part of their platoon when they refused to kill or capture the Crow princess. That guard summoned up a hunting party and with the assistance of chocobo-riding militia they found and killed Avin and Akka. They threw the bodies into a midden heap and Tsu and Cassis only ever received scraps of material left over.

    Several years later a group from the church of the demon Sabazios came to the village. They asked after an old story concerning two brothers who had died nearby. One man could tell them all - he revealed he was the same platoon member who had recognised the twins. Proudly he showed the church members the midden heap.

    Akka’s body was half missing, dug up and bones chewed by feral dogs over the years. Avin's body, however, was still intact. The body was taken on a long journey back to the church's roots in the Tular Plains. There a strange man known colloquially as the 'white haired godling’, alongside Sabazios himself, poured divine and demonic magic into the body. They summoned the spirit of Avin back from the dead and shoved it back from where it came. His body changed, his mind altered and he became a dark, serving member of the Sabazios church. He has very little memory of his life as a living kenku.

    Especially not his sister.

    Skills:

    Fighting - From a young age Avin was taught the art of fighting with a katana, wakasashi, tanto, naginata and Akashiman bow. He prefers to use the naginata as still has his one from life.

    Survival - From years of living as a member of the kegareta Avin is an expert in surviving off the world around him in almost any environment. He can start fires, find food and build shelters. This also includes tracking skills.

    Abilities:

    Avin's abilities can be separated into two main divisions - those coming from Divine and those coming from Demonic power.

    Divine:

    Immortality -
    Avin is entirely immortal. This means that he cannot die in any way. If he is incapacitated then he will need to wait until his body restores itself via natural healing times and methods. He also does not have any blood in his body, but only dust and sand, and neither has a beating heart due to the fact it is not needed. His body runs entirely on deity energy and dust (which is literally a physical manifestation of the energy - by losing it he loses energy). He therefore has no need to breathe and so cannot be killed by suffocation or a single stab to the heart. He can however 'bleed out' if enough of the dust spills out, and he also feels the pain on his flesh etc. Instead the ways to stop him are burning, falling, dismemberment etc. His flesh is still vulnerable to poisons etc, to the point where they will enact their normal methods as if on a living body (causing pain etc - the only exception is to fully stopping a heart and suffocating) and his bones are still able to be broken. If his body is separated then they will seek to find one another. The head will roll and various other body parts will move according to their ability (hand using fingers to crawl etc). The largest part of the body is that which all others will be drawn to. Avin also can only touch, smell, hear, see etc through the parts of his body that should be able to do so naturally (head, hands etc). He has no accelerated healing, he will heal at a natural rate as if alive.

    Survive -
    As a member of the undead Avin does not need to eat or sleep. Instead he goes into a state of mediation to revive if he needs to heal or rest.

    Demonic:

    Death Sense -
    Avin can 'see death’. That is, he can see (as a thin dark-coloured mist) and smell (as burnt meat) where necromancy has been used and where death has been present. He can also sense, depending on the thickness of the mist and the pungency of the smell, how close a being might be to death on a rough scale. It can tell when they might expect to die soon, even if unexpected. This latter sense is subject to the whims of fate, and the opportunities of other magics and powers, and by no means is set in stone.

    Death Touch -
    Avin's very touch makes everything decay. This is the direct touch of anything from his claws and fingers. It causes the acceleration of natural decay. Leaves will dry up and crackle within five seconds. Material will begin to wear two times faster than is natural. Skin necrosis will start on any direct flesh, but at a very weak rate, spreading a rate of one centimetre per ten full seconds and only on the surface. Hair and feathers will dry up and fall out and fruit will rot in a matter of seconds. This touch is mostly a curse to Avin. The only items that are immune are those he died with (his weapons and armour and leather gloves) and the beings who gave him the power (the demon Sabazios and the half-god Vindrexis).
    Weakness: Using Death Touch causes Avin extreme pain, therefore he is very resistant to using it. The necromancy coming from him to cause it literally is killing him in the process. Avin can endure the pain of this for currently two seconds before stopping and needing to take a break for ten full minutes. The only way that he keeps on going to touch is if he is forced to do so. If he touches anything for longer than a full two minutes Avin will become incapacitated.

    Equipment:

    A rusted iron set of katana, wakizashi and tanto.
    An iron naginata that has been restored.
    A leather jerkin covering the torso and upper limbs.
    Leather gloves.
    A yew yumi bow and a dozen arrows (yew and iron).
    A set of thin but strong chains and manacles which he constantly carries in case of coming across enemies. Made of an unknown material, but not possessing any special abilities as yet and is as strong as iron.
    Rope.
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    Last edited by Philomel; 11-15-2017 at 08:23 AM.

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    First things first, I've got a few questions about immortality. The way it's described raises quite a few questions, such as, does Avin have some sort of special/accelerated healing ability that isn't described here? Also, it says that he's not immune to poison, but what would a poison meant to kill do to him if he's immune to death? I'll probably have a few more questions regarding this profile but that's for now.

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    Avin's Avatar

    GP
    235

    Name
    Avin Painbringer
    Age
    18 (when died)
    Race
    Undead Kenku
    Gender
    Male
    Location
    Corone
    At the beginning of the paragraph it stated that, "This means that he cannot die in any way. If he is incapacitated then he will need to wait until his body restores itself via natural healing times and methods".

    I have now added: "This means that he cannot die in any way, but can be reduced to a state where his body does not work but his spirit remains inside the body, and he is entirely aware (incapacitated). He must endure the healing process to continue. He has no accelerated healing, he will heal at a natural rate as if alive," to make it clearer.

    As an addition to poisons I have added:
    "to the point where they will enact their normal methods as if on a living body (causing pain etc - the only exception is to fully stopping a heart and suffocating)"

    I put in the dust as a way of still enabling him to bleed out. The main point is that his spirit remains in the body after incapacitation and will not depart. He also is always aware in these periods, which is immensely painful and horrible to experience.

    Note: If you want I am willing on working in a construct of a heart, that is similar to what a heart does in pumping blood around the body. Instead it would pump the dust (physical manifestation of the magical energy keeping him alive) around the body.
    Last edited by Philomel; 11-15-2017 at 07:40 AM.

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    Okay, thanks. The heart thing is probably fine the way it is, but you may need to lock Death Touch until next level. If you don't want to do that, there'd need to be a lot of general nerfing to bring the TPL down.

    Regarding Avin's equipment, he has an awful lot of weaponry, but it seems integral to his character (being the items he died with) so I'm thinking to compensate I'll start you with 100 GP instead of 200. Sound fair?

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    EXP: 1,875, Level: 1
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    Avin's Avatar

    GP
    235

    Name
    Avin Painbringer
    Age
    18 (when died)
    Race
    Undead Kenku
    Gender
    Male
    Location
    Corone
    I've tried to make Death Touch pretty weak as is, it shouldn't cause death at all, just decay and is very easy to avoid. Is it the skin necrosis that is the problem or the fact it is a permanent effect?

    I can add a pain element to it if that helps as a negative effect on Avin himself. I.e. when he touches something (anything) it causes him pain as he causes decay to that item. Time limit can be something like a couple of seconds before he cannot bare it?

    Does that work?

    Thematically it's part of the make up of Avin, and goes with the bringer of decay.

    And sure lower the starting GP if you want. It was more to have more things that he can use (as these are literally the only things he can touch without ruining them).
    Last edited by Philomel; 11-15-2017 at 08:16 AM.

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    upon the cheek of night

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    It's nothing specific about the ability, it's just that this character is quite powerful overall, as you noted at the beginning of the profile. But if you make those changes I think you'll be good to go.

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    Avin's Avatar

    GP
    235

    Name
    Avin Painbringer
    Age
    18 (when died)
    Race
    Undead Kenku
    Gender
    Male
    Location
    Corone
    Following was added:
    "Weakness: Using Death Touch causes Avin extreme pain, therefore he is very resistant to using it. The necromancy coming from him to cause it literally is killing him in the process. Avin can endure the pain of this for currently two seconds before stopping and needing to take a break for ten full minutes. The only way that he keeps on going to touch is if he is forced to do so. If he touches anything for longer than a full two minutes Avin will become incapacitated."

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