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    Valino Darashan III

    Name: Valino Drashan III
    Age: 18
    Race: Human
    Height: 6'0”
    Weight: 190 lbs
    Occupation: Vagrant
    Personality:

    Valino's personality is a hard one to explain. On one hand the young man is the result of a life time of pious teachings, rigid structures and a dictator like father. This means that he has the up most respect for authority, is highly disciplined and has a strong moral code. It also means that he is occasionally a bit prejudiced, stubborn and rather narrow minded. On the other hand he is still young, and has never had much of a childhood to begin with so while he certainly isn't a deranged lunatic he does have a few psychological issues that stemmed from this mainly that he is easily frustrated, has a tendency to act brashly and can at times be unusually temperamental. He is also slightly anti-social but is generally empathetic towards others.

    History:

    Valino is a church boy born and raised. The son of a witch hunter turned priest named Valino Darashan II (the boy's mother died during child birth) the child never really had a choice. To him the church was life, his extremely pious and controlling father made sure of it. Valino attended a private military school owned by the church where he was trained mentally and physically to work for the church. The boy's muscular frame and natural athletic ability made him good choice to become a church soldier and after Valino's father pulled a few strings from with the clergy he was chosen to become a Paladin, special soldiers of the church that wielded both sword and holy magic and served its cause.

    It was during this training that Valino began to have a crises of faith. While the lad had still believed in the words and the message of the sway he began to notice the words of the Church and the actions of the Church were a bit contradictory at times and it bothered him. While grappling with these feelings the young man had a dream that he believed came from the Sway themselves. In the dream he saw himself leaving Salvar to travel to far away lands, lands he recognized only from pictures he's seen in books. Valino took this as a sign. The Sway didn't want him to stay sequestered away in the icy lands of Salvar, they wanted him to see lands beyond and bring their light with him.

    As the next morning, before dawn's first light he rode to the nearest harbor and payed for passage on the first ship out of Salvar.

    Appearance:

    At first glance Valino looks like a model student of the clergy. His hair is cut short, and kept clean, his posture is near perfect and his facial features look surprisingly stern for one so young. His face isn't perfect and does contain some minor blemishes. There is a large scar on his chin, as well as one above his eye. His nose is slightly crooked and his skin is a bit rough. His face is always kept shaved.


    Skills:

    Basic Schooling: Unlike a lot of boys Valino has received some basic schooling. He knows how to read, write, and perform basic arithmetic.

    Billingual: Is fluent in both Common, and Salvaran.

    Wilderness survival: Living in the country side Valino has learned a little bit about the surviving in the wilderness such as how to (or make) shelter, how to start fires, and how to find food.

    Basic swordsmanship: Valino has received training in how to effectively wield a sword. While no expert he does have the basics down well putting him roughly on par with your average soldier.

    Horsemanship: Valino knows how to ride a horse well enough to traverse even somewhat difficult terrain or poor conditions.

    Abilities:

    Blessings

    Blessings are the bread and butter of those who have been taught to be Paladins of the Sway. Blessings are buff spells that the caster can bestow unto others. While the effects of blessings can vary all blessings have a few things in common.
    • A caster cannot bless themselves. They must bless others.
    • A caster must make physical contact with somebody in order to bless them. Blessings Cannot be cast through armor, clothing or magical barriers.
    • No person can receive more than one blessing at any given time.
    • At his current power level blessings bestowed by Valino last for 1 hour.
    • At his current power level Valino can cast no more that 4 blessings per 24 hours.
    • Under no circumstances can a blessing boost any given stat or ability above any hard rules caps.


    Blessing of Relief – For the duration of the blessing the recipient will not feel pain, anxiety, anger, or sadness. It is important to note that this blessing does not provide any sort of healing. It merely puts the recipient at ease and relives their pain.

    Blessing of Strength – This blessing increases the recipient's natural physical strength, allowing them to exert approximately 500lbs of extra force for the duration of the blessing. Some recipients of the blessing have also reported a boost in courage from the blessing but this is likely just a psychological affect of having their strength increased.

    Blessing of Clarity – This blessing clears recipients mind of intrusive feelings or thoughts, similar to what people experience after meditation. It also provides a sharp boost to their natural senses allowing them to easily notice things they might otherwise miss. This ability will not increase the range of those the senses but it will help the recipient notice even the smallest details or changes in the things they do sense. For example, while under the influence of this blessing, somebody could easily pick out a distinct voice is a noisy crowd or notice a needle laying in a haystack.

    Equipment/Weapons:

    1x Wool cloak.
    1x Copy of the The Book of the Sway.
    1x Leather canteen.
    1x Iron breast plate.
    1x Iron shortsword.
    1x Small iron round shield.
    1x Flint and steel for starting fires.
    Last edited by The Preacher; 12-10-2017 at 12:45 PM.

  2. #2
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    Hey, welcome (back?) to Althanas! Glad to see you here.

    My only question right now is about Blessing of Relief. It looks like the last sentence explaining what it does is missing something important, could you fill that in for me?

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    Oh yeah sorry about that. It's been fixed.

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    Thanks! I just need you to make two more changes if you don't mind. We typically don't allow abilities that multiply other abilities, like the way that Blessings of Strength and Clarity are currently described, as these can create a number of problems if used on higher level characters. Please modify these two abilities so that they give a concrete buff rather than a multiplier. (So, for example, for Blessing of Strength you could have it so that it buffs the person's strength to 2x that of a normal person, rather than doubling their innate strength).

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    Fair enough. I updated strength in give a static increase to the amount of force somebody can generate. The exact number is somewhat arbitrary so if it's too high I have no problems toning it down. Clarity was a bit trickier so I changed it slightly to match my original intention. It doesn't increase the range of the senses but does allow people to better notice minor changes or details.

    Edit: Added the clause about rules caps.

    Edit 2: And a cap on the number of blessing per day.
    Last edited by The Preacher; 12-10-2017 at 12:46 PM.

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    upon the cheek of night

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    Thanks for making those changes, you are approved. Go have fun!

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