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    Workshop: By the time they figure out what went wrong we'll be sitting on a beach...

    Name of Completed Thread: By the time they figure out what went wrong we'll be sitting on a beach...
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    Name of Authors: Storm Veritas, Breaker, Shinsou Vaan Osiris
    Type of Thread: Quest
    Thread Length: 31 Posts
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    Date Closed: 10th February 2018

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    and this is Jackass!

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    Waiving my right to feedback rewards, because I was in it.

    Story: 29/30

    From start to finish this was an empowering experience. Cats featured heavily in this thread, which was an immediate hit. Storm's death hit my stomach hard, though, and this served to build up tension until the finely crafted crescendo of him falling on the floor and then appearing like a god over the skies of Lornius howling like a banshee left me dumbstruck from the utter genius of it all. Quests were had, intergalactic snakes were ridden and Atilla the horsey horse died and respawned in a majestic way that only Douglas Adams could have captured.

    I deducted a point only because the characters failed to make a Hans Gruber reference at any point during the thread.

    I felt the pacing was a little off, but didn't deduct any points because we had so much fun writing the thread that I felt we deserved a 29.

    Character: 29/30

    Form is temporary; class is permanent. Right? Well, here that couldn't be truer. We were all fucking amazing, and we had so much fun writing the thread that anything less than a 29 would be a criminal offence.

    Prose: JC/30

    We wrote like magicians. And, you guessed it, we had fun doing it too.

    Wildcard:

    It's Friday, Friday, gotta get down on Friday.

    Final score: JC/100

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