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Zook Murnig
01-25-08, 01:11 PM
Since the previous thread for this died in early November, and I still think it's a valid topic, here comes the return of Constructive Criticism.


Alright, this is going to be similar to the Something Positive threads, except there will be no ego-massage. Simply offer a piece of constructive criticism for the person who posted before you, that they may improve their own writing.

No flaming, as always. Don't just post to say "you suck, write better," or anything of that sort. This is intended as a way to help each other improve.

EDIT: I hate that I have this nagging feeling, but I feel like I must also warn against blatant ego-massage such as "I see no way for you to improve" or "You're awesome, keep it up." Similar reasons.

Karuka
01-25-08, 02:59 PM
Having read your stuff...my suggestions for you are

1) implement interactive detail to really bring the setting to life.

and

2) Caduceus is a person, not a bunch of text bites. He knows who he is, even though that changes constantly as he grows and develops. Treat him as a human being that grows, develops, and has depth to him.