KnightVanguard
12-16-08, 10:36 PM
Dear Reader,
Hello and thank you for dropping in. This is my first Solo thread in my first attempt to write within an online community. This post is only a draft and meant to give other writers insight into my literary style. It is not meant for the viewing of potential judges yet, there are likely several revisions in its future and I wouldn’t want to make you read this segment multiple times (large pieces may be changed or removed entirely).
If you have feedback or constructive criticism to offer you may PM me, I check in everyday and would be glad for the help. Still being in a draft stage this passage may omit important details that I have simply overlooked or may be unclear in places. I apologize for that in advance and will work to correct such mistakes if you let me know.
I hope you enjoy this modest offering and I look forward to writing with many of you soon.
~ KV
***
Ten years ago the borderlanders started pouring into Republic territory from their fringe worlds. On tiny civilian craft never meant for interstellar travel. On regal cargo freighters that had spent the last years holding court in heaps of scrap. They were divided by race and language and creed, but one thing held them together then. Fear. That was the first warning, like birds fleeing before a gathering storm. Soon after, an alien armada descended upon the outer planets like a horde of locusts. Massive warships blackened the sky through sheer numbers when they came to bleed a world dry.
The Cyrian people had never seen an enemy so powerful… or so barbaric. Stealing every resource the horde left only smoldering ruin in its wake. Entire colonies reduced to nothing but charred bone and ash. The Cyrians tried their best to fight, but the enemy pressed in from every direction. World by world the Republic was being devoured by the beast that called itself the Therin Federation. Ten years and only the last ragged lines of defense remained. Wrapped in this tattered armor the home world Cyrus was far removed from the bloody turmoil. For now…
Cyrus
On a cloudless night the stone surface of the Grand Library reflected the moonlight. A starry horizon melted into the sparkling ocean so it was hard to tell where either ended or if the sky flowed down in waves to beat a soothing lullaby against the shore. That secluded beach held the last hope for the Cyrian people, and a more magnificent prison Jonah could not have imagined.
Out on the terrace the crisp ocean breeze stirred his dark hair, lazily carrying the sounds of laughter and music and the salted scents of the sea. The tree line flirted with the edge of the sand, whispering with its rustling leaves. The island breathed a sigh of relief after the day’s oppressive heat. It wasn’t cold, but Jonah welcomed Amanda’s warmth by his side. Her arms rested on the stone rail as she watched the festival below, wisps of golden hair flowing behind her as the wind tugged playfully at her thin clothes. She was a green eyed vision, beautiful as any caged bird. Jonah smiled wistfully and took a sip of honeyed wine. He held his glass gently, rolling the drink in slow circles; for it felt as fragile as the mood. It was like a dream he feared to wake from.
This was the first time they found themselves relieved of duty in months. On the beach two stories beneath them the party was ringed by glowing torches and the other researchers swayed like the flames that lit the night. Servants in white made their way through the throng, granting food or drinks to any who wished it. Derek, a young man from Jonah’s own weapon’s division, twirled about a redhead whose name he couldn’t recall. The girl giggled and kicked up sand as she swirled. Others were paired as well, or chatting cordially with the friends they had made. They all glistened faintly in the firelight that embraced them and held back the darkness. “That looks like fun, doesn’t it?” Amanda asked without looking his way.
“Of course.” the lie tasted bitter, stealing the small pleasure of his drink. “But I’m not much of a dancer.” he finished absently. Reality was a shadow, ever present and hard to escape for long. For all the allure of the place, for all the supposed nobility of the cause that brought them there, he never found joy in it. Sometimes he was amazed by how well the others took their captivity. Just beyond the torchlight, not ten yards from where Derek pranced about, stood a man all in black. The soldier shifted his weight in the sand, moving a rifle from one hand to the other. Jonah could make out no others but he knew they were there. They were always there. The Republic had gathered its best and brightest to this place and had no intention of letting them go.
The Therin Armada made the nation fearful. It had made them desperate. The military found itself without restrictions and without morals. Many young scientists were “recruited” to work in places like the Library. The resulting advances in technology even seemed to stem the tide at first, but they were pillars of sand trying to push back the ocean. In the end what had once been the Republic’s most modest endeavor became its last hope for salvation.
Project Knight had grown into a chimera, absorbing the most fearsome pieces of the military’s failed initiatives. Energy weaponry, shielding, stealth technology, fusion power, artificial intelligence; everything was merged. Gravitational manipulation was the final piece of the puzzle. Recent development of the Gravitic Drive had made Cyrian ships the fastest in the known galaxy. Collapse two points in the fabric space into one and a bridge was formed, a wormhole. Ships could advance or retreat from battle in a fraction of the time, but even that was far from enough. Now a miniaturized version was supposed to give Knight the finishing touch. It would have been impressive, if it wasn’t sad.
“Why do you think he does that?” Amanda’s voice snapped him to the present. Her lips were pursed pensively, hesitant before the glass in her hand, “He stares at the stars endlessly if you let him. Like he’s never seen them before.” Her words were a bare whisper. The “he” she meant was standing on the beach below. It was the reason for the night’s celebration of wine and dancing, the first complete Knight Prototype: Vanguard. A humanoid figure garbed head to toe in ornate silvery armor, alone amidst the merriment and staring up at the sky. Two meters tall and lean as a man in his prime it was a symbol of Cyrian pride and an homage to the ancestral warriors for which it was named. Years of hard work and painstaking research, all for that jumped up robot. Tomorrow they would test its Gravitic Drive.
“Vanguard?” his cup clinked faintly on the railing as he lowered it with a grimace, “Maybe it’s distracted by shiny objects. I’ll ask the team working on its visual sensory system to do something about it before the final test. I’m sure that sort of thing would cause problems in the field.”
Amanda merely gave him a cool sidelong glance but, for the way he cringed inside, she may well have slapped him, “He is so much more than some weapon Jonah. Independent thought, free will—“
“…a ghost in the machine?” He finished for her with a raised eyebrow. “You think Vanguard is a genuine personality. A synthetic creature giving rise to a soul... That’s science fiction nonsense and wishful thinking. I thought better of you Amanda.”
She rounded on him then, eyes aflame with anger and passion, “Don’t you understand? He’s wasted on the war.” relenting, she let out a heavy sigh that took her fight left with it, “I’m recommending we keep him here after the rest are built. He deserves better.” Her voice was meek but her concern sounded almost maternal. It would have been moving in any other context. Now it only soured his temper further.
“We deserve better Amanda. I don’t remember volunteering for this seven years ago. I remember soldiers dragging me out of my University on Orion and shipping me here.” Everything had been so perfect until the Prototype found its way into the conversation. Into his life. The damned thing managed to ruin everything. He had wanted to wait for the right time to ask her, but the atmosphere was gone. This would be his last chance and it couldn’t go to waste. He clasped her bare shoulders, words flowing in a rush, “Let’s leave tomorrow. I can make arrangements. I can take you with me and we’ll be free of all this.”
“You can’t talk like that Jonah, it’s treason.” she shook her head, soft hands pushing against his chest as she avoided his eyes, “Besides our work is too important. Think of the people. If this fails… The Therins are merciless. They’ll raze every planet in the Republic if we don’t stop them.”
“To hell with the Republic and its people. We’re no better than slaves here.” Was she really so blind? “Mass production of the Knights is never going to win the war, nothing will. It’s past time we cut our losses.”
“I know you don’t mean that Jonah.” She started delicately, “And I know this has been hard on you. It’s hard on us all. But where would we even go if we left? Vanguard is the only chance any of us have. No matter what happens we can’t abandon him now.”
Vanguard? Vanguard? Would she really rather die with that thing than survive with him… “No.” He growled, “I’m done. Working on that damned droid has taken everything from me; my past, my home, my freedom. I will NOT let it take my life too.” He leveled an accusatory finger at the machine and clumsily swiped his glass over the railing. Too late he lunged to catch it, the red wine tumbling out of his reach, falling to the sand in slow motion. The shrill cry of breaking glass was much louder than it should have been… the music had stopped. His colleagues were looking up in stunned silence; even the guard had taken note of the disturbance. A different gaze drew Jonah’s though. A shimmering blue visor set in a silver-white helm. Vanguard fixed him with an icy glare. But it was just a droid and such emotion was impossible. Jonah backed away from the rail cautiously in spite of himself, “You’ll wish you chose me.” He spat under his breath, turning from her. His words hung stale in the air as he withdrew to his room.
Hello and thank you for dropping in. This is my first Solo thread in my first attempt to write within an online community. This post is only a draft and meant to give other writers insight into my literary style. It is not meant for the viewing of potential judges yet, there are likely several revisions in its future and I wouldn’t want to make you read this segment multiple times (large pieces may be changed or removed entirely).
If you have feedback or constructive criticism to offer you may PM me, I check in everyday and would be glad for the help. Still being in a draft stage this passage may omit important details that I have simply overlooked or may be unclear in places. I apologize for that in advance and will work to correct such mistakes if you let me know.
I hope you enjoy this modest offering and I look forward to writing with many of you soon.
~ KV
***
Ten years ago the borderlanders started pouring into Republic territory from their fringe worlds. On tiny civilian craft never meant for interstellar travel. On regal cargo freighters that had spent the last years holding court in heaps of scrap. They were divided by race and language and creed, but one thing held them together then. Fear. That was the first warning, like birds fleeing before a gathering storm. Soon after, an alien armada descended upon the outer planets like a horde of locusts. Massive warships blackened the sky through sheer numbers when they came to bleed a world dry.
The Cyrian people had never seen an enemy so powerful… or so barbaric. Stealing every resource the horde left only smoldering ruin in its wake. Entire colonies reduced to nothing but charred bone and ash. The Cyrians tried their best to fight, but the enemy pressed in from every direction. World by world the Republic was being devoured by the beast that called itself the Therin Federation. Ten years and only the last ragged lines of defense remained. Wrapped in this tattered armor the home world Cyrus was far removed from the bloody turmoil. For now…
Cyrus
On a cloudless night the stone surface of the Grand Library reflected the moonlight. A starry horizon melted into the sparkling ocean so it was hard to tell where either ended or if the sky flowed down in waves to beat a soothing lullaby against the shore. That secluded beach held the last hope for the Cyrian people, and a more magnificent prison Jonah could not have imagined.
Out on the terrace the crisp ocean breeze stirred his dark hair, lazily carrying the sounds of laughter and music and the salted scents of the sea. The tree line flirted with the edge of the sand, whispering with its rustling leaves. The island breathed a sigh of relief after the day’s oppressive heat. It wasn’t cold, but Jonah welcomed Amanda’s warmth by his side. Her arms rested on the stone rail as she watched the festival below, wisps of golden hair flowing behind her as the wind tugged playfully at her thin clothes. She was a green eyed vision, beautiful as any caged bird. Jonah smiled wistfully and took a sip of honeyed wine. He held his glass gently, rolling the drink in slow circles; for it felt as fragile as the mood. It was like a dream he feared to wake from.
This was the first time they found themselves relieved of duty in months. On the beach two stories beneath them the party was ringed by glowing torches and the other researchers swayed like the flames that lit the night. Servants in white made their way through the throng, granting food or drinks to any who wished it. Derek, a young man from Jonah’s own weapon’s division, twirled about a redhead whose name he couldn’t recall. The girl giggled and kicked up sand as she swirled. Others were paired as well, or chatting cordially with the friends they had made. They all glistened faintly in the firelight that embraced them and held back the darkness. “That looks like fun, doesn’t it?” Amanda asked without looking his way.
“Of course.” the lie tasted bitter, stealing the small pleasure of his drink. “But I’m not much of a dancer.” he finished absently. Reality was a shadow, ever present and hard to escape for long. For all the allure of the place, for all the supposed nobility of the cause that brought them there, he never found joy in it. Sometimes he was amazed by how well the others took their captivity. Just beyond the torchlight, not ten yards from where Derek pranced about, stood a man all in black. The soldier shifted his weight in the sand, moving a rifle from one hand to the other. Jonah could make out no others but he knew they were there. They were always there. The Republic had gathered its best and brightest to this place and had no intention of letting them go.
The Therin Armada made the nation fearful. It had made them desperate. The military found itself without restrictions and without morals. Many young scientists were “recruited” to work in places like the Library. The resulting advances in technology even seemed to stem the tide at first, but they were pillars of sand trying to push back the ocean. In the end what had once been the Republic’s most modest endeavor became its last hope for salvation.
Project Knight had grown into a chimera, absorbing the most fearsome pieces of the military’s failed initiatives. Energy weaponry, shielding, stealth technology, fusion power, artificial intelligence; everything was merged. Gravitational manipulation was the final piece of the puzzle. Recent development of the Gravitic Drive had made Cyrian ships the fastest in the known galaxy. Collapse two points in the fabric space into one and a bridge was formed, a wormhole. Ships could advance or retreat from battle in a fraction of the time, but even that was far from enough. Now a miniaturized version was supposed to give Knight the finishing touch. It would have been impressive, if it wasn’t sad.
“Why do you think he does that?” Amanda’s voice snapped him to the present. Her lips were pursed pensively, hesitant before the glass in her hand, “He stares at the stars endlessly if you let him. Like he’s never seen them before.” Her words were a bare whisper. The “he” she meant was standing on the beach below. It was the reason for the night’s celebration of wine and dancing, the first complete Knight Prototype: Vanguard. A humanoid figure garbed head to toe in ornate silvery armor, alone amidst the merriment and staring up at the sky. Two meters tall and lean as a man in his prime it was a symbol of Cyrian pride and an homage to the ancestral warriors for which it was named. Years of hard work and painstaking research, all for that jumped up robot. Tomorrow they would test its Gravitic Drive.
“Vanguard?” his cup clinked faintly on the railing as he lowered it with a grimace, “Maybe it’s distracted by shiny objects. I’ll ask the team working on its visual sensory system to do something about it before the final test. I’m sure that sort of thing would cause problems in the field.”
Amanda merely gave him a cool sidelong glance but, for the way he cringed inside, she may well have slapped him, “He is so much more than some weapon Jonah. Independent thought, free will—“
“…a ghost in the machine?” He finished for her with a raised eyebrow. “You think Vanguard is a genuine personality. A synthetic creature giving rise to a soul... That’s science fiction nonsense and wishful thinking. I thought better of you Amanda.”
She rounded on him then, eyes aflame with anger and passion, “Don’t you understand? He’s wasted on the war.” relenting, she let out a heavy sigh that took her fight left with it, “I’m recommending we keep him here after the rest are built. He deserves better.” Her voice was meek but her concern sounded almost maternal. It would have been moving in any other context. Now it only soured his temper further.
“We deserve better Amanda. I don’t remember volunteering for this seven years ago. I remember soldiers dragging me out of my University on Orion and shipping me here.” Everything had been so perfect until the Prototype found its way into the conversation. Into his life. The damned thing managed to ruin everything. He had wanted to wait for the right time to ask her, but the atmosphere was gone. This would be his last chance and it couldn’t go to waste. He clasped her bare shoulders, words flowing in a rush, “Let’s leave tomorrow. I can make arrangements. I can take you with me and we’ll be free of all this.”
“You can’t talk like that Jonah, it’s treason.” she shook her head, soft hands pushing against his chest as she avoided his eyes, “Besides our work is too important. Think of the people. If this fails… The Therins are merciless. They’ll raze every planet in the Republic if we don’t stop them.”
“To hell with the Republic and its people. We’re no better than slaves here.” Was she really so blind? “Mass production of the Knights is never going to win the war, nothing will. It’s past time we cut our losses.”
“I know you don’t mean that Jonah.” She started delicately, “And I know this has been hard on you. It’s hard on us all. But where would we even go if we left? Vanguard is the only chance any of us have. No matter what happens we can’t abandon him now.”
Vanguard? Vanguard? Would she really rather die with that thing than survive with him… “No.” He growled, “I’m done. Working on that damned droid has taken everything from me; my past, my home, my freedom. I will NOT let it take my life too.” He leveled an accusatory finger at the machine and clumsily swiped his glass over the railing. Too late he lunged to catch it, the red wine tumbling out of his reach, falling to the sand in slow motion. The shrill cry of breaking glass was much louder than it should have been… the music had stopped. His colleagues were looking up in stunned silence; even the guard had taken note of the disturbance. A different gaze drew Jonah’s though. A shimmering blue visor set in a silver-white helm. Vanguard fixed him with an icy glare. But it was just a droid and such emotion was impossible. Jonah backed away from the rail cautiously in spite of himself, “You’ll wish you chose me.” He spat under his breath, turning from her. His words hung stale in the air as he withdrew to his room.