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ArchMagius
07-15-06, 04:58 AM
Name: Adriana uth Sabvriana
Age: 165
Race: Dark Elf
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Black
Height: 5’3”
Weight: 140lbs.
Occupation: Cleric of Mystus

Personality:
“Chaotic Death bringer”
Adriana is a cleric of Mystus, and as such her personality reflects her beliefs. Since Mystus requires of its clerics to spread chaos about the world as well as a little conflict and death here and there, Adriana in turn is very spontaneous in nature as well as she is quick to anger. She enjoys violence even more than the crowds at a coliseum blood battle. When interacting with her, she will not really care what you have to say unless it is something important, pertains to one of her interests, or if you are wishing to pick a fight. If it is anything else and you are not a personal friend be wary…

Appearance: At first glance, Adriana appears to be a female Dark Elvin warrior with body made of extreme curves. She wears a suit of Dark Elvin plate armor with very minimal undergarments underneath. (Parts include breastplate, paldrons (two piece shoulder guards that protect up to the elbow), and leg guards (two pieces that protect from top of thigh to bottom of shin). Her other clothing includes black leather bikini-like undergarments of which anyone staring at her, as most do, can see quite clearly. At her waist on the left side she has a longsword buckled to her belt that is carried in a black sheath. Additionally she carries a few darts that are in a small leather container on the side of her waist on the right.


History:
Adriana’s history is not one of irregularity or uniqueness… almost. She was sent away at the age of 50 to train as a cleric of Mystus. At age 100 she became a cleric of Mystus. The one thing that made her stand out from the rest of the clerics of her level was that she could talk to Mystus through her dreams. For sixty five years Adriana did what Mystus told her to do, continuing to ensue chaos and destruction. But one day, she was told by Mystus that his avatar was now walking the land of Althanas and that she was to find him and protect him and ensure the survival of this avatar.
And so Adriana finally found this avatar, at an inn not far from where she stood right now.


Skills:
The following skills are listed at levels of proficiencies. Essentially, this is how they work.
Expert Proficiency (10 out of 10)
Highly Proficient (7-9 out of ten)
Moderately Proficient (5-7 out of ten)
Average Proficiency (4-5 out of ten)
Poor Proficiency (2-3 out of ten)
General Skills (Strength and Endurance)
- Moderately Proficient with Divine Spells
- Average Proficient with Longsword
- Poorly Proficient with Darts
Racial Skills
- Dark vision (the ability to see in almost no light situations in a sixty foot radius around her; it comes out as black and white)
Divine Skills (god given abilities)
- Imbue Weapon: Adriana calls out to Mystus and her blade becomes surrounded by a black mist which will allow her to move faster in combat and dodge attacks more efficiently for three of her opponents posts

Equipment:
-steel longsword
-steel armor
-steel darts (x5)
-amulet of Mystus (gives her 10 seconds invisibility)

Arawn
07-15-06, 08:02 AM
Good layout, but this profile's biggest flaw is a lack of detail. Here are the editions I need you to make:

- All proficiencies could use some detail for others to understand just what you mean by "highly" or "moderately" proficient. People have different ideas for these terms.

- I'd like only average proficiency with your longsword since you have spellcrafting as well.

- Dark Vision, how much does it help you to see in the dark? Edit that in.

- Your proficiency with Divine Spells only accounts for skills you listed, right? You are only allowed to use spells in plain view in your profile.

- Make a note that truly potent warriors can be completely unaffected by your aura.

- Imbue Weapon is far too vague. Does it heat/freeze your weapon or allow it to shoot fire/ice? I need considerably more detail in that aspect as well as what you define as a "short period of time".

- Your equipment materials needs to be specified. Are your weapons iron or steel? The same goes for your armor, which should be listed as equipment as well. Note that such armor as you described will hinder feats of great agility for your character.

- You amulet of Mystus has no listed characteristics. If left so, it's to be understood as a plain amulet with no abilities whatsoever. Change this if it is not the case.

ArchMagius
07-15-06, 12:48 PM
I made the changes you requested, I hope you like.

Arawn
07-15-06, 02:29 PM
- Dark Vision can't work in absolute (magical) darkness. Edit it in.

- You did not change your aura spell as I asked.

- 60 secs ofinvisibility is too much for the amulet. Change it, please.

- What are your darts made out of?

- When you say "one blast" of fire/ice, does that mean per day or what? Also, clarify "or she may use the imbuement to cause additional damage to her enemies" so that we know the extent of your powers.

ArchMagius
07-16-06, 12:40 PM
made more changes

Cyrus the virus
07-19-06, 03:15 PM
With imbue weapon, what do you mean it does 'more damage'? Does that mean it adds burns along with a typical wound, or does the blade simply cut through good guys easier?

Magius101
07-19-06, 03:42 PM
it will just make the wound larger, so instead of lets say five damage.... it does seven on a scale of 1 to a hundred.

ArchMagius
07-19-06, 03:49 PM
sorry bout that, i forgot to switch files... but ya... what he said

Cyrus the virus
07-19-06, 04:06 PM
Yeah, but that doesn't really work since we don't use any kind of hit points. The best course would be to put some kind of realitic enchantment on it, but something very weak to reflect your level.

ArchMagius
07-19-06, 04:17 PM
how is that, i changed it so that instead of damage it allows her to move a bit faster for a limited amount of time

Cyrus the virus
07-19-06, 04:27 PM
That works, just don't abuse it. Act like it makes her reflexes better and such, but don't be zipping around at the speed of light.

Approved!