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Jazwind
07-18-06, 01:03 PM
Name: Jazwind F Banshee
Age: 17
Race: Halfbreed, cross between a fox and a dragon
Height/Weight: 4'11" 100lbs
Eye color: Amber
Hair color: White
Occupation: Theif

Appearance: Jazwind is short. Her white hair drapes her shoulders. Atop her head sits two white fox ears. Her skin is a natural tan, like she came from somewhere hot. She normaly wares a large over coat unless she is comfortable with whom ever she is around. In the middle of her forhead is a small greenish horn. It seems like bone but slightly twisted. Her eyes match her mothers, amber. She wares a brown leather collor with a large dragon claw dangleing from the center. She has earings to match of two dragon fangs. She is normaly barefoot. Her tail is long and slinder. It begens with white fur but ends in a split with green dragon scales.

Personality: Jazwind is normaly shy. She was tought to hate humans but her mind is opening up to new things and people. Her favorite drink is apple cider. If she befriends someone she is very loyal and protective. She like to question things and doesent know much of the human lifestyle.

Weapons: Two ringblades that were passed down to her from her mother. In both blades is a hard glass vile containing water from the river of death. Most effective on zombie and undead creatures. They send the unguided souls back to death. Leaveing their corpse bare and unuseable to any necromancers.

Skills: She can transform to a creature form. Its a fox, the size of a pony, that has white fur and wings. Its tail and eyes are the same as Jazwinds. Her wings are crossed between feather and bone and leather, makeing them useless. Jazwind can also move and shape water with her mind. Being able to make weapons of ice. She can only make 1 per thread. She isent very good with her weapon at this point but she is still learning, maybe slightly below average. The wepons of ice are only as sturdy as bronze and melt after battle.

Speed: As fast a normal fox can move.

History: Jazwind came from a broken home. Her mothers name was Icepelt. Icepelt was a creation of the humans. Her body and mind was fused with that of a small human child. Jazwinds mother was raped by a dragon lord by the name of Vargrave, thus produceing Jazwind and her broher Kruxsin. Both of whom showed the signs of a crossbreed. Icepelt escaped Vargrave during her early pregnancy and hid away. Lord Vargrave was fourous. He sent minions to look for them. When he found them Icepelt put up a deadly fight but disapeared soon after. Jazwind went into hideing with her brother and refused to belive her mother had died. She grew up alone takeing care of her brother. At the age of sixteen she killed her father and took a prize, his fangs and the smallest claw on his feet. Her brother is now old enough to fend for himself. Now Jazwind wonders in search of her lost mother. Doing what she has to to get by.

Cyrus the virus
07-18-06, 01:30 PM
I'd like to meet the guy who got a dragon to breed with a fox... For various reasons. Haha :p

Those blades need to be made of steel, and I'd like you to specify how they're more effective against the undead. Do they cut through an undead person easier, or does it repel them somehow?

Under 'skills', please include how skilled she is with her weapons. Average skill is good at this level.

Moving and shaping water is similar to stuff my character can do, good stuff ;) But I need to know how strong the weapons she can make is. Include a little note there that she can only make weapons about as strong as bronze, for now. It can get stronger as you level! I'd like a limit on how many weapons she can make in a thread, too, but this limit can disappear altogether when you level up a bit.

Her speed seems a bit too good to me, even if it doesn't last long. She already has quite a bit of skills, and I'm always reluctant to approve a transformation if there are other good abilities. How about editing the speed so that it makes her 1.5 times as fast as she is normally? Just to put a limit on it, you know?

Sorry if it seems like a lot to change, but it won't take long, and soon you'll be writing :D Level 1 doesn't take very long to get to. Mwaha.

Jazwind
07-18-06, 02:09 PM
"I edited it" *Still not knowing what she is doing*

Cyrus the virus
07-18-06, 03:03 PM
That works. Don't worry, you'll get the hang of things soon. What you need to learn is the different between OOC (out of character) and IC (in character) forums :p You wrote your response here as if you were in character. No need for quotation marks unless you're writing in a quest or something.

Basically, the IC forums are the Peaceful Promenade all the way down to Other Regions, and other IC forums include Tournaments, the Bazaar and the yet-to-be-used Athylia's Verse. Everything else is OOC so you can just be yourself there!

Approved.