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Raven Mysterio
10-08-09, 01:51 AM
Name: Raven Mysterio
Age: Ageless (Apparent Age About 23)
Race: Human/Immortal
Hair Color: White
Eye Color: Dark Red
Height: 6'3"
Weight: 230 lbs

*Personality: Raven is self centered, egotistical, mean, down right rude, does not get along with others. Most say he's evil, he's also insane.

Appearance: His skin is pale white, and his hair is white as snow do to the time he spent in limbo(Will explain). He wears all black clothing with a golden mask on his face, his eyes can be seen, nearly every part of his body is covered with the exception of his hands, and where the mask does not cover. He has long sharp nails on both hands. He also wears over his normal clothing, custom fitted leather armor.

History:

Raven Mysterio and his twin brother, Orphan, where born to a normal family, to a normal life, but both had a slightly abnormal ability, they could control time. They aged normally while they grew up and there parents knew they could not teach them what they needed to master there abilities so they found help from a magician coming threw town one day and told him of there abilities, he was more then grateful to bring them on, and he trained both boys. Orphan's powers developed faster then Ravens, and over time Raven grew angry with his brother, and with there master for not teaching him. One day, after being beaten by Orphan in a practice duel, he took the sword and without there master realizing it, he sent it threw his chest killing him. He then ran into the master's study and grabbed three books before Orphan could gather himself and find him. They found in a real fight and in the process Orphan managed to open up a portal and pushed his brother in. The next thing Raven knew he was in a place of nothingness, no light, only darkness, a place he called Limbo, how much time he spent there he did not know, the time there made him pale, and his hair became white from the lack of light. After an eternity there he realized his body had changed, not only was he not as he was, but he was part of the darkness, during his time in limbo his mind had grown crazy, he was part of the darkness and he let it in, soon he found he could see in the dark as if it was day. He then began to research the three books he had taken, all on time, and the things he believed his brother was being taught that he hadn't been. Soon he learned how to open portals but needed a focal point, a edge to cut them open with. He looked down to his hands and realized he had the perfect tools for the job, during his time in limbo and part of the darkness had twisted his nails into sharp knife like tools. He cut open a rift and was free, the time after his freeing as been used to find suitable weapons, and his clothing which he killed a store clerk for after it was tailored for him.

Skills:

Novice Time Magic: Does Not Age

Dagger Fighting(Average):He can use steel daggers in both hands in battle

Hand Fighting(Below Average): Can use his razor sharp finger nails in battle.

Dark Magic: Can see in pitch darkness. Can create a shadow clone that cannot attack but can be used to detracts people he's fighting or animals or things like that.

Equipment: He has two daggers he keeps to his sides for battle that are made of steel. Has a vile that can be filled with darkness for future use, but can only be filled in Limbo, but he cannot return at the moment.

*Familiars: Shadow Wisp, he has no name, because Raven does not care about it, it seems to be a manifestation of his own shadow power that he can control. He can tell it to do things, such as go distract those guards, and cannot be destroyed, Raven considers it a nuisance, but will not do anything to get rid of it.

Logan
10-08-09, 03:24 PM
The only thing I'm gonna request is that the time slow down be lowered to more like 10 seconds. He is, after all, level 0. At level 1, when you submit your update thread, if I take it I'll allow the 30 seconds then. 10 seconds is half a post, but enough time for him to jump as necessary.

Also, I'd like to see a minor weakness in him that prevents him more from using this skill in heated battles. It's essentially unstoppable, really.

The restriction could be something simple like "only effects non-magical characters". By that, I mean that if he's facing a character who has lots of magic, it'd be harder for him to slow down time. Does that make sense?

Everything else is cool though.

(EDIT: This post'll stay, but I'll go with Task's comments.)

Taskmienster
10-08-09, 03:30 PM
((I seem to have been posted over. My edits are in affect though, since a good majority of things that were out of place were missed.))

Novice Time Magic :: At this level I can't allow you to be able to open portals for travel, or stop time for 30 seconds. Level 0 characters typically can't stop time at all, since it offers a very unfair advantage. I'll allow the lack of aging, but the rest I can't allow at this time.

Dagger/Hand fighting :: You'll have to give it some form of skill, since you have so much else going on I'd allow one to be at average, the other at below average. You can't have the two in the same place because they're two different things.

Dark Magic :: If you create a shadow clone, it can't attack at this time. If you use shadows, you can only move them very slightly and only for a very short period of time. The channeled dark balls can only be six inches in diameter at this time.

On that note, you'll have to remove all but one of the darkness spells. There are simply too many and they're too strong.

Equipment :: daggers can be currently made of only steel. I assume since I can't allow the portal transporation at this level, that the vial of darkness is going to be somewhat useless. If you want to use it, you can always wait till later levels when you could potentially get the ability to open portals.

Raven Mysterio
10-08-09, 05:00 PM
Changed, sorry edited and then had to got away from the comp for a moment, how does it look now?

Taskmienster
10-08-09, 07:34 PM
You can add one of the dark spells that I noted above, the night sight was fine to have with one of the other three. If you'd like to add those, you are more than welcome to. You can also have the vial, though if you need to refill it in only in the Limbo place, you just can't at this time. Limbo, and the ability to use portals and the vial, seem to be a plot device necessary for the character. I don't want to take away every opportunity you have for your overall plot, I just have to moderate to remove the portal making skill at this time. In the future you can have it, future levels and such, just for now it's too much.

If you want to make edits and stuff, you're free to. After you make edits, or chose not to, whichever it be... just post here to tell me that you've done so. Thanks. :p

Raven Mysterio
10-08-09, 07:51 PM
Alrighty all edited up.

Taskmienster
10-08-09, 08:48 PM
Alright. So, just for future reference, the darkness sight should only pertain to natural darkness. And the familiar should only be used in battles and stuff against other writers if you get permission from them.

Approved, and welcome to the site!