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Oosemay
12-12-09, 02:58 PM
Name: Oosmey
Age: 121 years old
Race: Half Dragon
Hair Color: Bark Brown
Eye Color: Brownish Red
Height: 5’6”
Weight:135 lbs
*Occupation:

Appearance: short, about 5’4”, dark tan skin with tattoos of leaves on every visible surface.

History: He was raised by his parents, not knowing what they were until about the age of ten, when he started manifesting his powers. That was when they came to him and explained what they and he were. Half Dragons. Some of the most powerful spell casters in Althanas. He dove into his studies of sorcery almost immediately, learning as much as he could as quickly as he could. His powers rapidly grew, almost exponentially, until he outstripped his parents, and they threw him out in the street.

Skills:
Magic Missile: Creates a trio of darts made of pure energy and force, causing the same damage as an arrow fired from an oak longbow.
Flaming Sphere: Creates a ball of flaming energy projected at the target, five feet wide, burning anything that it touches.
Scorching Ray: Produces a ray of burning light, cutting through the target like a low power laser.
Light: Causes a source of light to be formed, similar in intensity to a torch, and can be transferred to and from inanimate objects.
Dark: Causes all sources of light in a thirty foot radius to be temporarily snuffed, lasting for one minute.
Shield: Creates a plane of force stationed in front of the caster, blocking attacks like a shield worn on the arm would. Still requires skill with a shield. Lasts for the duration of a battle.
Weapons:
Average skill with greatsword.
Can shift to a small dragon the size of a horse three times(Dragon and back) before he needs to rest and eat. Needs to rest for an hour before he can shift again. Can produce a set of natural scale mail armor to cover his body at will.

Equipment: Greatsword; Sunrod(1)(Produces a light like a torch, ignited by striking the head on a hard surface, lasts one hour); Thunderstones(4)(when thrown or struck on a hard surface, creates an overpressure wave that knocks anybody within fifteen feet of the strike zone back, dealing damage in the manner of broken bones and bruises); Notebook(Contains ongoing research for possible spells.)
*Familiars: Young wyrm green dragon, his sister, can communicate with Oosemay telepathically, about the size as a small dog.

Logan
12-14-09, 02:39 AM
Welcome to Althanas.

I noticed these abilities are mostly from the AD&D standard abilities and spells. Very common.

I'd like to see you maybe alter magic missile a bit and make it less AD&D-ish. Maybe throw in your own flair to it. Same with flaming sphere and scorching ray. The light and dark abilities are basically support abilities, but need the weaknesses against abilities from higher level characters that would overpower them.

For instance, if Oomsey uses Dark and a character level 3 has a light ability, their light ability would overpower his dark. It's just a way to ensure balance and also fairness to higher levels.

The scale mail armor skill is a bit overpowered as-is, but we can adjust that by making the scale mail the equivalent of simple bone strength. At a higher level you could increase it to actual dragon scale strength.

He can't shift in the middle of fighting, and would require a great deal of concentration at this level to shift.

As for the equipment, the greatsword is made of standard steel and is slightly dull at the current time (can be sharpened or upgraded in the Bazaar once he's approved). His Sunrod is made of oak and the top is a ball of steel. And the thunderstones are a no-go. They are just too powerful.

And his familiar has no abilities unless you list them.


Once you've made those changes I'll re-evaluate the profile.

Taskmienster
02-06-10, 02:34 PM
This profile has been waiting for a response for quite some time. I'm going to close it and move it to the Pending Approvals area in the Crystal Ball.

If you would like to continue the approval in the future, feel free to PM a mod and we'll move it back.