Polofar Streakfar

[sleeping_bear]

Name: Polofar Streakfar
Age: 25
Race: Tree Troll
Hair Color: Red
Eye Color: Black
Height: 7'5"
Weight: 500lbs

Personality: Polofar is temperamental. You do not want to cross him, and if he approaches you aggresively... then run. On the other hand, he is incredibly dumb so that if he approaches you he can and will be distracted by absolutely anything.

Occupation: Wilderness Protector

Appearance: Polofar looks like he fell out the ugly tree and kept on falling. He has scars galore, everywhere about his body and more appear everyday as he gets into fights due to temper. As of this he looks like he is going to fight at any second. He has green rocky skin. He usually wears clothes fashioned from many leaves of the forest.

History: Polofar was taught by the school of life to survive in the inhospitable forests of Raiaera. He was born without a family. When he opened his eyes he saw no one this gave the incredibly dumb troll the impression that the trees were his family. Therefore he was not seen for most of his early life as he lived through the 'drama' of his tree ‘family’. During his rise, Xem’zund burned down the forest he lived in, which made him furious, and caused him to declare for the people fighting against Xem’zund. While fighting in the resistance Polofar was attacked by one of Xem’zund’s unholy minions and was left for dead, when in fact he was just in a magic-induced coma.

He came out of the coma recently and has found he has procured a small ability in wilderness magic, which has made him even stronger than before. As of this he has been travelling the world until he can find a way to revive his dead tree ’family’.

Skills:
Branch Boxing : Polofar is a masterful at unarmed combat
‘Ways of the Wilderness’ : A skill refined over the years meaning that when Polofar finds that he is in the wild and not actually in civilisation his chances of surviving without fault or injury are basically 4X that of the normal human beings.

Abilities:
He has incredibly tough skin (about 1.5X that of a human) but, can still be damaged with an sufficiently strong attack.
His strength is unrivalled among the tree trolls, he can punch through a wall and will due to his idiocy a guage of his strength in comparison to a normal human is around 1.5X a human.
He has a very small ability in forest magic meaning he can communicate with the trees, fauna and animals of the wilderness.

Items: Since he is so skilled in the ways of the forest and can find his own food, Polofar only needs to carry the clothes on his back. He also has money for when he goes to cities.

[Enigmatic Immortal]

Sorry for the delay, but let's go ahead and get you moving. Not the strangest of creatures I have seen, but definitely has potential if done well.

Skills: Please list exactly what 'Ways of the wilderness' entails. Is this cooking? Poison bush identification, foraging? Bird yodeling perhaps? The details do matter, good sir, and the more you give, the happier a camper you'll be! (Get it? A camping reference in regards to your wilderness? Get it? Right, moving on...)

Abilities: I see you have tough skin, and as I read it you'll need be struck by suffienct force. Okay, nothing really out of the ordinary, just don't go crazy with it or you'll be penalized in your scores.

Strength unrivaled amongst trolls? What is an average troll compared to a normal human? Is it 4X, 2X, 1.5X? I need a gauge to help me determine how strong your character is outside punching walls apart.

Forest communication? I see no harm in that. Again, don't use it as a form of powergaming, as hard as it would be to do.

Give me these edits, and I'll give you the go ahead. :)

[sleeping_bear]

Sorry for taking so long in my edits my internet was down. The changes have been made ( I know how obvious that sounds), I hope that they are to your satisfaction (And the judges) and that they will go down ike a breeze through some trees.

[Enigmatic Immortal]

No worries about the time log. Life happens. Thank you for the edits, now we will go to the next stage. (Yep, more edits.)

General Notes: I would like you to separate each skill and ability instead of jamming them all into one paragraph. Like so:

Skill X: Does this

Skill Y: Does this

Ability X:

Ability Y:

This allows the judges to read your character sheet quickly, and also allow players an easier time to search and know what you can do. Clutter makes it difficult to know what you can do. This little change will easily fix that.

For your skills, they are all good to go, it's just survival in the wild he has with the Wilderness thing. Nothing out of the ordinary. But remember that if he's playing stupid he won't know how certain plants can combine to make potions and what not. He'll just know what berries are tasty, and what berries give him bad gas and other simplistic things.

Your strength: Generally at level 0 we do not allow anyone to have Strength higher than 2X max. I understand that being a troll will make him strong, but with his tough skin and his strength he's a wee bit powerful for starting out the gate. I would suggest listing his Toughness as 1.5X the norm, and 1.5X the norm for strength as well. These abilities will obviously level up as you go, but for now these edits will get you going right away. (In the future, we always determine your ability levels when compared to the Average Human.)

Do this for me, and your loyalty will be rewarded young sith apprentice.

[sleeping_bear]

I have made the changes I think this is what you mean thank you for the feedback and I am looking forward to writing on Althanas.
P.S. I think of myself more as a Jedi

[Enigmatic Immortal]

Looks good young padawan. Have fun now!

Approved!