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Jack Frost
07-28-11, 08:20 PM
I am rewriting Jack, and so I need to remake my new profile to start anew. I've changed the personality, the history, and not a whole lot else so approval shouldn't be a problem as it had already been approved...

Name: Jack Frost
Age: ??? He appears 21
Race: Avatar of ice
Hair Color: Silver
Eye Color: Teal
Height: 6" 2'
Weight: 120
Occupation: Assistant to Elderess Crowe

Personality: Jack is a carefree young man who enjoys the simple things in life. Despite his cold aura, which literally will drop the temperature of the air around him a degree or two, he has a very warm personality. Those who take the time to befriend him will find a great friend who will always try to lend a hand to those who need it.

Appearance: Jack is tall and slender with spiky-ish silver hair and teal eyes. His face is sharp, everything is angular, his gaze is cold and piercing, like the gales of a blizzard. His outfit is strange to say the least. His bottom layer is a black long sleeved top that molds to his skin, and black compression shorts. Over that he wears a plain black shirt and trousers. To top it all off he wears a big bulky black leather jacket, no matter what the weather is. also a strange thing is his breath, it could be two hundred degrees out side and it will still be a visible white fog.

History: Before man, before the forerunners, the world was occupied by gods, and among them was one named Father Winter. The gods were an odd bunch, and never truly regulated their powers. Simple battles could shape all of Althanas, and they did. But due to their lack of regulation they began to fade, and soon they were just auras floating around Althanas. Some became elements, others seasons. Some even became emotions the new dwellers would inherit. Father winter became, well, winter.
it had been like that for a long time, before one day, in a blizzard unlike any other, he re-condensed into a new form. This form was Jack Frost. Jack was later found buried in the snow by the elves of Underwood, and was raised as their own. They soon realized he was strange, always complaining he was cold, his breath could always be seen. He was strange, and excommunicated because of it. Then one day he met Jolly, the happy penguin. Jolly was an agent of the north sent to find Jack. Jolly told Jack that he would help shape the world again as the gods slowly returned. But until then he would have to get stronger. Jack was then shortly engaged to be married, and given a task as apprentice to the Elven Eldress Crowe, who would teach him all she knew so he could pass it on later

Abilities:
I forgot to put this in last time, so I'm going to go ahead and add it in.
I'm going to refer to an alts scale of one to ten. 1 is average, two above average, three is expert.

Strength: 1.5- Jack is a light weight compared to other fighters. He can put 150 pounds of pressure behind a blade and lift 200 pounds.

Stamina: 1.5- Jack can run five miles without stopping if needed, but would be dead tired and require an hour of rest before running, and would receive a penalty of only being able to run 2.5

Speed: 1- Jack runs at an average pace.

Reflexes: 2.5- Having to control projectiles in mid air has sharpened his reflexes greatly. Due to his speed however this does little in the way of dodging.

Intelligence: 4- Jacks underlying wisdom of his past life is starting to seep through, because of this he retains knowledge read almost completely, and reads at a rather impressive speed. This is also due to his position, which forces him to memorize everything.

Endurance: 1.5 Jack can take more hits than the average man, but he is still rather wimpy, he can ignore one mild scratch and fight confidently, but any others and he will be distracted by the pain.

Ice magic: Above Average- Jack can summon needles of ice from his breath and throw them at a faster speed than before, AND he can Create and control up to three balls of ice about the size of baseballs, and control them in an area of up to ten feet away from Jacks position. He can throw them at an average pitching speed. OR He could make one big bowling ball sized ball of ice with the same throwing speed and area of control.

Jack has also learned to withhold his aura. This can be used to build up pressure and let him exhale small gusts of ice and wind about the strength of a slightly above average storm wind. The ability can be about twice a battle, and causes a large amount of stress on his body. A third gust can be used, but will pop Jacks lungs.

In addition he can also focus in and see water molecules, which he uses as a stepping stone to do his other abilities. Almost all unique talents he learns through improvisation will be gained by him doing something abstract with this skill.
Skills:
Swordsmanship- Average: Jack has only gained this skill due to occasional spars he had had with his late "Father"

Equipment: A bag of holding to carry all of his gear, and a small collection of novels and Tomes. A Plint longsword and Plint plating on his jacket.

Familiars: None

SandStorm
07-29-11, 02:28 PM
Hey Jack, welcome back.

One thing I'm going to need you to do is separate skills and abilities so this profile looks a bit more organized. Ice magic and his stats will need to be placed in the ability category, while Swordsmanship and Intelligence are skills.

If you have any questions feel free to PM me.

SandStorm
08-22-11, 07:58 PM
Alright, I didn't realize you had made the changes I asked.

My only issue is that you have attempted to put your own scale on your stats. While that's cool and all, I cannot allow it. We are working on a ()x as _____ system right now, meaning "So and So" is 2x as strong as a normal person, etc. If I were to allow everyone to just use their own self-created scale for stats it would get just too confusing for myself and the other RoG mods.

As far as stamina and endurance, remove one of them because they're pretty much the same thing (in fact, leave endurance and remove stamina. And speed... It's average, so there's no need to list it, it's just implied as being average.

Once you've edited your profile please post a note here saying so this time. Thank you

SandStorm
09-23-11, 11:32 AM
Moving this until you're ready to make the changes I've asked.

Go ahead and PM me once you want this reopened.

Until then it is Unaproved.