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tita154
08-24-06, 07:10 PM
Name: Grizva Fallen
Age: 150
Race: Centaur (don't know if that's ok with you)
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Brown
Height: 2.5 meters
Weight: 2.8 meters
Occupation: Adventurer
Language: Elvish
Location: Forests of Raiaera

Appearance: pretty much like this, but with a clearer kind of brown.
(pls check this page) realms.reichel.net/images/races/centaur.gif


Skills: Accurate with bow and any other ranged object. Can hear and see from farther and more clearly than a normal human.

Equipment: Longbow, pack of 25 arrows. Short steel sword.

(i don't know if you need it to be colored speech. personally, i think it's easier to read that way.)
History:

It was a rainy day a Grizva was tired of his life. He remembered the days he played in the forest, the days he still had friends, the days before it happened. He sat near a tree (in the only position possible for a centaur. With the posterior legs curved and the anterior ones straight, his tail touching the ground) and began to medidate. Like all centaurs, Grizva had ediatic memory (photographic memory) wich allowed him to relive events with such detail as if he was there that instant.

The sky was clear, no clouds could be seen and the sun was shining as if it was reborn. Young Grizva, with only 50 years old, was training his ranged abilities with his friends.
"Come on Grizva! Shoot it like you mean it!" Gult, the oldest of the three, was the one with the better aiming.
"Stop it Gult! You're distracting him. Let him do as he pleases..." it was Garron, the youngest of them, altough not the stupid one neither the weak one (as we see in so many movies).
The arrow swinged out of the bow and went directly to the target, a wooden bar with dots all over hit.
"See? I told you my aiming was fine."
However, instead of hitting the inteded target, it deviated to the right and landed point first into the head of a passing by rabbit.
"No! Grizva, what have you done?" Garron was terrified by the event.
"The wrath of the Gods will strike upon us!" Gult was as worried as Garron but he was the only one to make a decision. Without anyone seeing him, he grabbed his bow and two of his arrows.
"I'm sorry Grizva. This is the only way..." He pulled back the arrows and shot. The two arrows went straight for the intended targets: the first one landed on Grizva's forehead, the second one in his chest (the only way to knock out a centaur without harming him). Gult and Garrow then watched Grizva falling first to his knees and then completely lying down. THey picked Grizva up, and took him to a river. They washed their friend several times with the river's water and then went away, back home, leaving Grizva there knocked out.
The next morning, when Grizva woke up he went in search of his friends and family but it was no use, they were gone. The only one left was him, alongside with his punishment for killing one of The Gods' most beloved creatures, the rabbit.

Cyrus the virus
08-24-06, 07:20 PM
The skills are fine, but don't be too ridiculous with the accuracy. He should have trouble hitting a moving target from about 20 feet at this point, but a stationary one can be easier. You're level 0, which means you should be about the skill of someone with a bit of archery training. So no crazy shots, unless they're totally lucky or something like that, okay?

Also, please reduce your arrows to 25. I think that's a reasonable number. Try as hard as you can to keep track of them as well, and purchase more when needed, please.

Include that the sword is made of steel.

Also, do you want to add a history to explain how your character got to where he is at this point in his life? That might add depth to him!

tita154
08-25-06, 05:29 AM
it's modified

Cyrus the virus
08-25-06, 05:40 AM
Well, with the colored speech, keep in mind we have other skins that people may be using. I'm using the green one, so reading the dialogue is bothersome to the eyes. Just keep that in mind for your threads, since it's not usually a good idea to use colored text for that reason.

Approved.