The Learning Twist

[The Sweetest Thing]

"Three times this past week I reminded you! I told you I would be taking my day off!" Stacia all but shouted, standing in the steaming kitchens of the Last Night's Maiden with fists planted firmly on slim hips. The girl had brushed her hair and worn her best cloak for the occasion, and the humid atmosphere was curling her blonde locks by the second. Cheeks flushed to the shade of the cherry streaks in her hair, she looked down her nose at her employer.

Matron Silter scoffed, patting flour into a loaf of dough and kneading it against the counter. "The inn is full of scholars in town for the discourse on Haidian Demonology," the rotund cook said in a bored tone, intent on her baking. "They take their breakfast with the morning lectures at Ravenheart Academy, but they'll be back by noon and wanting a stout dinner. And clean dishes to eat it off, mind." Silter nodded her double chins at a sink piled high with pans greasy from the previous night's roast.

Stacia sniffed, keeping her hands folded behind her back. The smells made her stomach growl, but she had more pressing business than breakfast. "I told you I'd be off today." She drew on her mittens and edged toward the loading door, reaching for the handle. "Hannah should be in shortly."

"Hannah has been ill since-" a gust of wind swallowed the Matron's words, and Stacia let the door bang shut behind her.

The crisp air pinched her bottom and straightened her spine. Frost coated the mucky streets of Underwood and the slim walkways built over them for winter months. Only Watch Patrols and the occasional tradesmen braved the streets on such days, when the cold made everything slippery and dangerous, and the wind whipped silt and ice in your face no matter how you tugged at your hood.

Anastacia Alliendra spat muddy grit to the frozen ground and skipped nimbly from one plankway to the next. She gave wide berth to an overloaded hay cart which had slipped off the wooden rails and sunken slightly into the mire.

Two farm boys with one hand each on the bridle of their carthorse stood shouting at each other over the poor beast's back. The topic of the argument altered frequently, from whose fault the accident had been to which was preventing the other from successfully dislodging the wheels. As the slim girl with shimmering hair swayed past the lads left off arguing long enough to chase her with their eyes. Moments later a more personal, muttered argument sprang up.

Stacia felt their eyes and sighed. She could scarcely reduce the roll of her hips as she tightrope-walked the center of the plankway, both mittened hands holding her hood against the driving wind. A few months ago she would have gladly distracted them both from their troubles awhile with excellent company, and taken most of their coin in exchange. She was attempting to travel a new path in life, however, and it would not make much of a start to relapse while on her way to meet her teacher.

A seedling of doubt blossomed in her heart, and she shooed it away, smoothing her deerskin cloak down her flat stomach with both hands. Hard to think of a man she had bedded - and more particularly, a man she’d loved - as an instructor. It had been years since they last spoke though, and she knew of his presence in Underwood only by reputation. He had been more than willing to teach her all those seasons ago, but he had improved his place in Corone considerably since then. Sheriff of Underwood, they called him, and stories circulated of the night he had fought a wraithlike assassin across the rooftops of the city, driving the enemy away and saving dozens of lives. Would the fabled freedom fighter Joshua Cronen be as interested in a reformed prostitute as the young man called Breaker who she’d once known? Seldom had a question caused Stacia such trepidation.

The makeshift boardwalk gave way to frozen hardpack as the ground slanted upwards, and the wind grew stronger as she rounded a log cabin on the outskirts of town. Frost crackled beneath her soft boots as she followed the sounds of heavy breathing and flesh slapping on flesh.

Men are absolutely mad.

A half dozen of them were wrestling in pairs, slamming one another to the ground only to grapple for moments before struggling to their feet and repeating the process. A pair of elves tussled gracefully, a half-elf was matched with a lanky human, and a half-orc struggled against a man who looked more like a young ogre. All young males, they wore a colorful mixture of tattoos and scars - but not a one of them was wearing a shirt! A seventh figure stood with his back to her. Dressed in light black clothing and familiar metal boots, he watched all of his students at once, calling advice and congratulations by turn.

Stacia tried not to imagine what the wind must feel like on bare skin and took a deep, steadying breath. Wearing the slightest hint of a smile but keeping her hood up to shield her eyes and hair, she called out in a firm voice.

“My Breaker... would you not rather teach me than these men? I do believe you owe me a lesson or four, as it stands.”

[Breaker]

The fighters were six of the toughest in the Underwood Watch. Ignoring the harsh wind and biting chill, they clinched and threw one another with as much energy as when they’d started thirty minutes earlier. They fought as naturally as trees sway and fall in the wind, like a part of the deep forest all around. Each came from a different part of Althanas, but they might have been brothers for the similarities in upbringing. Poverty, pain, and above all else resistance to authority. They had been among the top ten duelists in sparring, and among the worst students in their combative classes. And as it turned out, they made an ideal group for testing extreme training. They’d spent the past half hour learning twelve throws and counter-throws from a standing clinch. And they surpassed all expectations in stamina and tolerance for the cold. While Ulric the half-orc was certainly built for such conditions, the skinny dark skinned Fallien native should have been a shivering wreck. Even so Royler matched Torrence the half-elf hold for hold, steady breath steaming in the wind.

Cronen was about to call a halt and demonstrate a new series of techniques when a familiar female voice hailed him. Memories of Anastacia Alliendra flickered through his mind. The way her face matched the cherry streaks in her hair when she got mad. The passion she had for each moment of life. The warmth of her naked body in bed. He almost wished he’d removed his shirt while exercising earlier, and smiled wryly in spite of himself. She certainly made a lasting impression.

“Run the full dozen six times each, three to a side. At half speed mind - show me flawless technique!” Josh called, ensuring they followed the command before pivoting. The adverse conditions had transformed the guardsmen's usual defiance into an absolute refusal to quit first. Josh stood side on so he could keep one eye on the warriors, and addressed Stacia with a smile.

“You’re a welcome sight for tired eyes, milady. Does Underwood like you well?" He broke off and called a correction to Ulric, who finally succeeded at pushing the stove-bellied Gannon onto his back. "How long since you joined our growing community?” He kept his voice soft and scratched at the Y-shaped scar beneath the stubble on his cheek. The girl took a step forward, leaning as if she had trouble hearing him. “I’ll gladly give you a lesson once I finish this training session,” he added, “but I’m sure you won’t mind waiting a little. These are the heroes who defend our walls, after all.” All he could see were her ruby lips and the outline of her figure beneath the tanned cloak, but she didn’t seem to have changed at all. Josh breathed in, smile expanding with his lungs. She still smelled like desire.

[The Sweetest Thing]

Stacia felt as if she’d been sleepwalking and awakened suddenly in a strange place.

Cronen looked the same as he always had. Hair a bit longer, a little more muscular perhaps - if that was possible! - but the same man, to be sure. From the Y-shaped scar down to his enchanted boots he resembled the man she’d met in the mountaintop town of Pagration. His voice even sounded the same - low, calm, reassuring - but...

Stacia felt her face flushing and forced the flustered feeling down. She would get what she wanted from the man, even if she could not decide exactly what that was. Was he mocking her with his courtly manner? Two years prior he’d spoken like a dock boy or a street tough - only as necessary, and never with the gallantry of a gentleman. Now all of a sudden he was loquacious as a poet. That’s all it is then, Stacia told herself, he’s been tutored in proper manners, probably to help secure his election as Sheriff. Leave it to a man to make common decency a commodity! She smoothed the deerskin cloak down her belly again and lowered her hood, shaking her long golden locks out. The wind rippled her hair like a banner, displaying the cherry streaks that set her aside from nearly every other blonde on Althanas.

“As you say, Lord Sheriff,” she curtsied and bowed her head like a serving girl waiting on the Queen of Scara Brae. “Far be it from a girl like me to distract men away from their important affairs. I only hope your guardsmen don’t take ill from running about losing their shirts in the winter. That happens, you’ll have to train me to patrol in their place.” She made her voice loud and girlish, so it carried over the whistling wind and grunting combatants.

Josh chuckled, but beyond him one of the bare-chested warriors turned from his sparring partner, sending her a leer and a wink.

“Why doncha’ come keep me warm then, girlie? Thataways, everyone’ll be happy!” The man had a strong chin, shoulder length raven hair and a musculature to match Cronen’s. Ordinarily she might not have minded sharing such a man’s sheets, but today he was a pawn on the chessboard, not a tool for the bedroom.

Schooling her features to look hurt and horrified, Stacia pouted her lower lip and cast her eyes expectantly to Josh.

[Breaker]

Standing like a porcelain-skinned mannequin, hair flared in the wind, she looked somehow more than human. Her unblemished face drew up, the very picture of indignation. Her lithe limbs turned inward and her hips angled away, as if she could not bear to face the guardsman’s comment. Even on such a grey day, her eyes shone like prevalida coins.

Josh felt himself hooked by her charm, tempted to clout the dark-haired fighter for offending the lady. The wind helped, cutting through his thin sifan clothing, pebbling is skin. Josh let himself feel the cold down to his bones, the way she must feel it. He took two paces back toward Underwood, putting himself downwind of Stacia and inhaling deeply. She had proven herself an expert of body language and facial cues in the past, but her scent would not lie. She smelled of flowers and soap, determination and confidence, with just a hint of trepidation. Josh’s smile grew wider and then vanished, his mouth becoming a stern line.

“Back to barracks at a double-trot,” he barked at the men, who left off wrestling and jogged toward Underwood, pausing only long enough to salute with fist to chest. “And send Jacob to me!” Josh called after them.

The sun split through two banks of grey cloud, flooding the clearing and making Stacia’s hair sparkle. She took full advantage of the moment, tossing her red-streaked mane and striding toward him so smoothly, it would have seemed a glide if not for the crunch of frost beneath her boots. She came to a halt so close her wind-driven hair nearly tickled his chin.

“There now,” Josh said, still as a statue, “you have my full attention. Shall we move inside, out of the wind?” He indicated the ramshackle outbuilding with the flapping thatch. “We’ve a training facility here, it may not look like much but it’s a good place to learn.” Cronen barely kept himself from laughing at the way she frowned, and went on as if not noticing her disappointment. “After a short assessment, I should be able to get you enrolled in some classes at the Academy. And I would truly like to sit down and hear of your life since we last met. Do you drink tea?"

[The Sweetest Thing]

Tea?!

Stacia bit her tongue and locked her hips to stop from cursing Cronen and kicking his shins. Or something rather higher! Her fingers bunched the back of her pale leather cloak as she selected the best words to lash him with. When last they’d met, he’d dedicated entire days to teaching her individual techniques, adjusting and polishing until she’d perfected the move and its variants, and only then moving on to the next. Have you risen so high so fast that you’d thrust me into the ranks with the rest of your louts?

The wind tugged at her hair incessantly, forcing her to waver while Joshua stayed still, an oak towering over a supple yew. The banks of grey cloud overhead rolled ever open, light without warmth bathing the clearing. As the flapping of the loose thatch grew louder and more frequent, the rumble of horseshoes on hardpack overcame it, and a dappled gelding rounded the outbuilding, steam gusting from its nostrils before being scattered by the wind. The wiry rider rolled from the saddle with his mount still in motion, landing in a bow fit for a courtroom amidst a cloud of dust.

“You called, Josh?” The young half-elf wore earth tones and a smarmy grin, his steed bearing a cased recurve bow and liviol tonfa on the side of its saddle. Coming out of the bow and clapping his floppy cloth cap over sun-darkened blond locks, Jake Narmolanya approached the pair as if walking on air.

Stacia had drawn her hood to protect her eyes from the silt the boy’s mount kicked up, fighting for composure. She knew Jacob mostly by reputation - he entertained himself and villagers by challenging stronger, much more experienced guardsmen to duels and making them look like fools. On her first day in Underwood she’d witnessed one such event, and watched most of it with her heart pounding and her fingers in her mouth. Jake - then a stranger, just a slim pointy-eared boy with a blue fighting stick - had dodged around his opponent’s longsword as if it were wielded by a scholar’s newborn daughter, not a renowned mercenary captain. Meanwhile, the teen had dented the man’s armor in so many places that smiths had to cut him out. A few minutes flirting with the right off-duty guards had taught Stacia that Jake apprenticed under Joshua Cronen more closely than any of the other Watchmen. Some were even willing to admit that six months prior, Jacob had been a sub-standard swordsman at best, known only for his prowess in archery. That was the kind of training Stacia desired.

[Breaker]

"Thank you for coming, Jake," Josh said, clasping the young half elf's forearm and giving it a firm shake. He leaned in to clap Jake on the back and whispered where Stacia could not hear, "I want you to take us to the Citadel." Leaning back, Josh gestured for the two to greet each other. "Jake, this is Anastacia Alliendra. Stacia, meet Jake Narmolanya."

"We've met before, milady," Jake piped, doing a perfect impression of his previous bow, "but I'm sure such a beauty wouldn't remember the likes of me."

"Quite the contrary, Master Narmolanya," Stacia said with a curtsy fit for a courtroom. Her cheeks looked tight from holding back a scowl and she smelled agitated, but she maintained a stiff smile. "I remember watching you defeat the mercenary, Captain Ipsen. You fought with great skill and precision." She folded her hands at her waist and stared at Josh as if to say and I know where you learned to fight.

"Saw that, did you?" Jake grinned, his smooth cheeks and pointed ears turning redder than the wind had made them. He doffed his cap as if thinking about bowing again, but thought better of it and clapped it back on his head. "My thanks milady, 'tis very kind of you to say."

"Stacia and I were about to do some training out of the wind," Josh said in a loud voice. He nodded at the outbuilding, its thatch roof still flapping steadily. With his back to Stacia, he gave the half elf a broad wink. "Jake, would you mind getting the door?" He asked.

"Certainly," Jake said, tapping a finger at his nose in a knowing fashion. He skirted around his horse and approached the outbuilding. As he neared the door Josh felt the Eternal Tap swell within the young half elf, and a healthy flow of power flowed out of him to lick at he door. As Jake reached out to open it, the door changed.

"Ladies first," Jake said, one hand on his horse's reins, the other clenching the iron knob. He pulled the door open and Josh took up a station on the far side.

Stacia sighed. She looked disappointed but kept that polite smile pasted on her face.

"Thank you, kind sir." She said, and approached the door.

[The Sweetest Thing]

Stacia may have been disappointed, but she still intended to conduct herself with dignity. She walked up to the filthy outbuilding, chin high, cloak snapping at her heels, boots treading the packed ground perhaps a little harder than necessary. She gave Jake an appreciative nod and shot a quick scowl at Cronen, who was looking at her with that goofy grin of his as she walked by. Once they were alone, she would have a few choice words to share with...

She stepped through the doorway and her soft boots slapped on marble tile.

Stacia gasped, one hand covering her cherry-lipped mouth, the other pressed over her flat stomach. Beautiful stained-glass windows showing images of warriors and monks looked down on her. Paintings depicting magnificent battle scenes decorated the smooth redbrick walls, and a scent of incense wafted through the air. From the stories she'd heard, Stacia knew this could only be one place.

The Citadel. She had often dreamed of coming here to train under the tutelage of the Ai'Brone monks, but her busy schedule had never allowed such a trip. Come to think of it, how had she traveled so far in just a single step? It must have something to do with Jake, she realized. Why else would Cronen have called for him? Stacia spun about on the spot, looking back to the windswept grounds of Underwood just as Josh came through and closed the door behind him.

"I thought you might appreciate a slightly nicer training environment," he said, smiling so broadly that the scar on his cheek dimpled.

"You absolute rascal!" Stacia cried. Finally losing control of her composure, she threw her arms around the infuriating man's neck and pasted a rougey kiss on his cheek. Chuckling, Josh hugged her back and then held her at arm's length.

"I'll take that as a yes?" He laughed, "come along now, there's someone I'd like you to meet.

He led her down a torch lit hallway, its walls inset with a dozen doors or more. Each seemed simple, plain oak with a brass knob. The heels of her boots clicked on the marble tile as she hastened to keep up with Josh. Suddenly she felt hot in her heavy cloak and thick woolen clothing. Stacia undid the clasp at her throat, allowing the cloak to fan out behind her, and air to flow through to her body. Even so, she could feel herself blushing to her cherry-dyed roots. Goodness but she was excited! A surprise visit to the Citadel, and now an introduction to...

They rounded a corner and entered a long hall where hundreds of candles burned at an altar to Trisgen, the Coronian deity of battle. An idol on the altar showed Trisgen himself, a man in gleaming armor on the back of a horse, broadsword held aloft in victory. Sun streaming through the stained glass windows gave the room a reddish tinge. Only one man occupied the rows of pews; a shaven-headed monk who rose at the sound of their entrance.

"Ahh, Breaker." The monk said, giving Josh a respectful half-bow, "It is good to see you again."

"Likewise, old friend," Josh grinned, "may I introduce one of my pupils, Anastacia Alliendra."

Pupils? When had they discussed that? Stacia hid her hands behind her back as they clenched into fists. She supposed she could put up with being one of Breaker's pupils, so long as that meant she'd receive proper instruction. But the man did have a bloody nerve.

"A pleasure to meet you," the monk said, smiling at her with warm amber eyes. "My name is Medsan. I have overseen much of your friend Joshua's training here. Will you follow me please?"

The monk led them down another corridor which seemed identical to the last; marble floors, redbrick walls, and rows upon rows of plain varnished doors. The monk hummed to himself as he walked, and Josh flowed effortlessly at his side, metal boots ringing on the hard floors. Stacia forced her fists to unclench and made certain not to stomp. Soon they stopped in front of an innocuous door that seemed no different from all the others. Although, Stacia had recently learned not to trust doors that seemed overly innocent. It turned out they could lead to just about anywhere.

"Are you ready?" Medsan asked.

"Ladies first," Josh smiled.

"Oh no you don't," Stacia said. She gave an exaggerated curtsy. "After you, milord."

[Breaker]

Josh chuckled and took the young woman's hand.

"Together, then." He said, and opened the door and walked through.

They stepped into a meadow in Concordia during summertime, and the doorway winked out of existence. Birds flitted about the forest singing their songs, and a pleasant breeze played in the trees and swayed the long grass. A patch of flowers blossomed nearby, and Stacia scampered over to pick one and bring it up to her nose, inhaling deeply.

Josh arched his back, breathing and smelling the sweet perfume of the flowers, and of Stacia. With his superhuman perception he could see detailed patterns in the bark on trees over a hundred yards away. He could hear a distant deer picking its way through the woods, and smell the decay beneath the fresh life of the forest.

"Are we still... in the Citadel?" Stacia asked, looking up from the lily she clutched in both hands. The breeze caught her red-gold hair and fanned it behind her.

"Yes," Josh said, "Medsan was kind enough to give me control of a room of illusions. I can change our location as the training demands. I figured we'd start with something basic." He gestured at the open space covered in soft grass, and paced to the middle of the meadow.

The sun beat down through a latticework of tree branches, throwing checkered shadows across his face. The breeze tugged at his black sifan clothing and mussed his short brown hair as he took up a casual, open fighting stance with both hands raised.

"Come now," he said, beckoning. "Show me what you remember."

[The Sweetest Thing]

Stacia was almost swept away by the wonder of the Citadel's magic. Her thick cloak and mittens had disappeared, leaving her in the boy's shirt and trousers she had worn for the occasion. She checked that her push-daggers were still sheathed on the back of her belt, and clicked the heels of her boots together, feeling the mechanisms that could unleash a spring-loaded toe knife at any time. She smiled and let the flower in her hands fall to the grass. She remembered what Breaker had taught her the last time they met.

Cherry-streaked hair fanned behind her as she ran straight for the mountain of a man. Her boots dug into the ground and she launched herself through the air as if leaping into his arms. She caught his collar and used it as an anchor to swing around onto his back, right arm sinking beneath his throat, left arm lacing through it to create a fulcrum for the choke. She wrapped her legs around his waist and hooked her feet around his thighs, giving herself extra leverage and squeezing for all she was worth.

Breaker bent at the waist and bowed forwards, one of his impossibly strong hands closing around her left wrist. He pulled her arm straight forward and shook his shoulders and Stacia tumbled off of his back, landing on the soft grass with a thud.

She scrambled to her feet only to find Josh holding one of her push daggers at her throat. The bloody man had somehow seized it from her belt in the process of dumping her in the dirt. Stacia tucked loose locks of golden hair behind her ears and took a few steps back, eyeing the blade in Breaker's hand.

"Didn't take you long to kill me," she quipped.

"If you're going to bring a weapon, you'd best use it, or keep it safe." He advised, and then drew his arm back. "Duck!" He cried, and then threw the dagger at her head.

Stacia fell to the ground for the second time, hearing the dagger whizz over top of her and thunk into the trunk of a nearby oak. She scrambled to her feet again, face growing hot.

"Are we here to play bloody games, or train?" She demanded, planting her tiny fists on slender hips.

"I'm illustrating a point," Breaker said calmly, spreading his hands, "you take too long to get to your feet when you fall. You need to learn to roll - watch!" He took two large strides and dove over Stacia's head, hitting the ground shoulder first and twisting so that he rolled to his feet facing her. "You need to be able to roll in any direction from any fall, and always come up facing your opponent." He said, not even bloody breathing hard.

"Fine," Stacia acknowledged with a sniff, "I see your point. Now here's mine!" She activated the lever inside her right boot. A short, sharp knife flipped open at the end of her toe. She took a powerful stride and aimed a merciless kick at Cronen's crotch.

[Breaker]

Josh dropped to one knee and caught Stacia's boot in both hands, careful to avoid the blade. He straightened up and tossed her foot forcefully, sending the young woman tumbling bottom over brains. She rolled awkwardly over her shoulder and came to her feet faster than before.

"Good!" Breaker called, applauding slowly, "you're getting the idea."

"Bruises are what I'm getting," Stacia grumbled, folding the boot-toe knife closed and stretching her spine. "Isn't there another way to practice this tumbling without you tossing me to the ground?" She asked.

"Perhaps," Breaker, said, stroking the the stubble on his chin, "but it would not have the same application. Come on now... again." He raised his hands and beckoned.

Stacia dusted her hands and paced back and forth, looking for a good angle of attack.

Josh stepped forwards and swept her legs with a low kick, tripping her to the ground again. She rolled to her feet but Josh was on top of her, dumping her in the dirt once more. Around and around the clearing he chased her, forcing her to rise faster and faster at every turn. Finally she managed to roll away from him and find stability on her feet.

"You," Stacia said, breathing heavily, "are an absolute cad of an instructor." She peeled sweat-slicked hair off her neck and tucked it behind her shoulders.

"Shall we stop for the day then?" Josh asked.

In answer, Stacia raised her tiny fists and charged.

[The Sweetest Thing]

By V'dralla's silken hair, how I want to hit him. Stacia offered a silent prayer up to her preferred Thayne as she raced toward Breaker. The man was quicker than a snake and savvier than an owl, so she would need her Goddess' blessing if she wanted to punch him in the middle of his great scarred face. And how she wanted to hit him. Her entire body smarted from the numerous times he'd sent her tumbling to the ground. She planted her feet in front of him and threw a barrage of punches at his fat head.

"Open those fists," Josh commanded as he deflected her blows effortlessly with a single sweep of his arm, "if you hit me with a closed hand, you'll break your knuckles."

Realizing he was right, Stacia flexed her fingers like a tiger's claws and struck again, slashing with long nails at his eyes and throat.

Breaker danced backwards, bobbing and weaving, avoiding each assault by a needle's breath.

Stacia gritted her teeth. She wanted to scream, but instead she redoubled her efforts. A breeze smelling of moss and trees rippled the fabric of her shirt and pants as she chased after Breaker, clawing the air and kicking at his knees and groin. The man was never there for her to hit, but she was coming bloody close. Stacia chased Breaker around for minutes until she was panting, ready to fall down on her bottom and just sit awhile.

"Don't stop now," Breaker chuckled, "you almost got me just there."

"Shut... up... you great... drave." She gasped, holding her heaving belly.

"Breathe in through your nose and out through your mouth," he lectured. The bloody man had not even begun sweating! Stacia was practically drenched.

She collapsed to her knees, breathing as she'd been advised and slowly regaining composure. While she rested Cronen walked across the clearing like a tomcat crossing the courtyard, his black boots crunching fallen leaves.

[Breaker]

Josh concentrated as he walked, picturing the forest clearing around him from a bird's eye view. He focused on changing the image and the world shimmered. It became a busy street, with people and horses and wagons frozen in place all around. Josh stood at the top of a short hill, with many still folk in between him and Stacia. He called down to her.

"How about a change of pace? This is a new exercise," he walked to a vendor's cart and plucked an orange from a round basket. Juice spurted from the skin as he dug a thumbnail in and peeled the fruit. "Climb to the top of the hill."

"That can't be all," Stacia said sternly, arms crossed beneath her breasts. She looked around at the frozen faces of the common folk, paused on their way to the bazaar or on a visit to friends or relatives. "Is there going to be a dragon?" She looked about in mock fright, "I rather hate dragons!"

"Just get to the top of the hill," Josh said. Pieces of orange skin struck the cobblestones as he continued peeling, and suddenly the setting sprang to life. People moved at varying speeds and carts trundled along noisily. Hawkers cried their wares and parents scolded children who clung to their hands. A light breeze passed across the street, ruffling hair and clothing and flapping a loose bit of canvas atop a vendor's stall.

Breaker watched Stacia's cherry streaked gold hair flutter in the wind. He wondered why this young beauty had come back into his life... surely she wanted something more than a warrior's training. That was what she'd get, though. He wondered how she would handle the exercise he'd planned. It would test more than just her skill and her endurance; it would push her to a breaking point. Josh tossed the last of the orange peel to the ground and broke off a piece of the fresh fruit. He looked down the hill.

"Come on."

[The Sweetest Thing]

Stacia scampered out of an oncoming wagon's path and climbed atop a heavy barrel standing against a nearby house. With feet perched on its rim and water swishing beneath her shoes, she peered at Cronen on the top of the hill. The bloody man was eating a bloody orange! Stacia shielded her eyes from the sun. She hated the great oaf, hated the way his chiseled jaw molded around each bite of the sweet fruit. She hated how his stupid muscles made his impossibly fashionable clothing ripple. And the way he moved, like a jungle cat prowling with each step, well that made her want to...

"You're coming with us, lassie!" A greasy faced, heavy-shouldered man stepped out of the throng and lifted the young woman off of the barrel, draping her over his shoulder. He turned and walked away swiftly, flanked by two lanky but equally greasy friends.

"What are you - NO! HELP!" Stacia screamed, beating her palms against the back of the man's neck and hammering his belly with her feet. He reacted about as much as a rock, and not one of the passerby seemed to notice her cries. They went about their daily business, eyes fixed steadfastly on the horizon.

"Shut yer' face, bitch." One of the lanky fellows spat, smacking her roughly on the bottom.

For a moment panic's icy claws tore at Stacia's heart, but then she remembered bloody Breaker, standing at the top of the hill, eating an orange. This was all his exercise, this was all his doing. Quite suddenly her urge to throttle the man quadrupled, and with that solitary desire came a note of calm. The girl clicked her heels together, opening her boot-toe knife, and kicked the heavyset man hard in the groin.

His yowl could be described only as a cross between a dying cat and a birthing mule. He released his precious burden and collapsed on the ground, bleeding and writhing.

Stacia landed on her feet and kicked out at the first lanky man's shin, scoring a gruesome hit to his calf muscle. She spun and delivered a second kick to the other tall man's chest, killing him as he came toward her. She stumbled slightly as her knife came free, still managing to duck under an agonized haymaker from the last remaining threat. The lanky man seethed and grabbed for her neck. Stacia let him clutch her; she had been strangled before. She drew the push dagger from the back of her belt and stabbed the man beneath the arm with calculated precision. He fell to the cobblestones as she shook blood from her weapon and sheathed it behind her back. Her throat hurt, but the pain paled by comparison to what she'd felt in the past.

With her rouged lips set in a firm line Stacia strode up the hill toward Cronen.

[Breaker]

Breaker winced as he watched Stacia dispatch of her first three assailants. She's definitely worked on her kicks, though she always was deadly with the push daggers. As the petite woman climbed the hill, a farmer hopped down from his cart and drew a hidden knife. Stacia disarmed him and cut his throat with his own blade, as smooth as silk. Blood seeped over the cobblestones, but none of the passerby noticed. The golden haired girl took another few steps uphill, only to have an elderly woman loop a shawl around her neck. Dragged off her feet, Stacia cut her way free with the captured dagger and stabbed the old woman in the heart. By the time she reached the top of the hill crimson stained her jacket and pants, and she was once again gasping for breath.

"You need to work on your endurance," Josh observed as she dropped to her knees. She punched him in the leg with what remained of her strength. It amounted to little. "But your skills are solid. There is much I could teach you."

"Couldn't... we... have started... with that?" Stacia panted. Sweat pasted her red-gold hair to her slender neck, where splotchy bruises formed. She dropped the bloody dagger with a clatter and gave Josh an icy blue glare.

"I wanted to see how you handled true threats," Breaker explained, "and test your abilities. After all, you want me to train you like one of my students, don't you?"

For a moment her glare melted, her eyes almost brimming with tears. The emotion disappeared behind a stern mask so quickly Breaker was not even sure he'd seen it.

"Don't you?"

"I... I don't know!" Stacia cried, flipping her sweaty mane back behind her shoulders, "I thought I did, but now that I'm here... I find myself wanting things the way they were." She stood up and placed a gentle palm on his chest. "The way you used to teach me."

"Stacia," he said, tasting each syllable of her name and taking her hand in both of his, "I only treated you differently before because I wanted to bed you. If you want the true training of a warrior, this is what it looks like."

[The Sweetest Thing]

"So now you don't want to bed me?" Stacia said before she could clap her hands over her mouth. She blushed as scarlet as the streaks in her hair, cheeks and neck heating uncomfortably. At least the bloody man didn't laugh.

"You're very beautiful," Josh said, "and I would be lucky to take you to my bed. But I have more on my mind for you now."

"What more?" She asked through her fingers, suddenly very concerned with the amount of people milling past them. Of course she knew they were all part of an illusion, but she still felt some modesty before the crowd.

"I always thought you had great potential," Josh said, "and the way you bested this challenge confirms as much. You have a natural talent for combat which cannot be taught. A killer instinct, some call it. There is much I could teach you... and I could see you becoming one of the most powerful warriors in all of Corone. If that is what you want."

Stacia climbed to her feet somewhat unsteadily. She looked around shyly, but the people passing on both sides paid them no mind.

"I truly don't know anymore," she said, a thousand yard gaze haunting her sapphire eyes, "I wish we could just sit and talk awhile. I came to you seeking training, but... now I wonder if that wasn't an excuse to see you."

Josh smiled. "Tea," he said, and the world changed again. The cobblestones melted away and became a thick carpet. The buildings and crowds disappeared, replaced by cozy redbrick walls. The vendor carts vanished, a crackling hearth and a comfy couch replacing them. A long low teak table separated the fire from the chesterfield, and on it perched a tray complete with teapot and two quaint cups.

They sat on the sofa together and Breaker poured for her first. It seemed whoever transformed him into a gentleman had not stopped at flowery language. Stacia snuggled up to his side and leaned her head on a muscular shoulder as she inhaled the tea's fragrance. The blood had faded from her clothing, and she spied her cloak and mittens folded in the corner.

"Will the monks get mad that we're using the room for something other than fighting?" She asked.

"No," Josh chuckled, "so long as we keep our clothes on, they won't mind." Stacia wondered how he knew that, specifically.

"It seems I've quite a decision to make," Stacia said, looking up at his scarred face. Did she see an instructor, or a lover there? She truthfully did not know.

"We can sit here as long as you like," Josh said. He took a short sip of steaming tea and smiled. The scar on his cheek dimpled.

[Storm Veritas]

Thread Title: The Learning Twist (http://www.althanas.com/world/showthread.php?31450-The-Learning-Twist/page2)
Judgment Type: Condensed Judgement
Participants:
- The Sweetest Thing
- Breaker

Plot: 15/30

The plot isn’t weak in this thread, but it’s not overly ambitious. I did find that there was some creativity deployed in what was a straightforward thread, and I appreciate that piece.

The pacing is quick, crisp, and easy to digest, but the thread also hints at a lot more. There’s obviously an underlying history between these two characters, as we know they’ve slept together and most likely adventured a little bit as well. I thought the strangest and perhaps most interesting part of the thread was the underlying conflict between the characters actions and desires; there was a sexual tension that was addressed here that gave the thread depth. I might have liked more of some of the internal reflection you offered early in the thread further on; we know Cronen at this point but his thoughts and motivations were a little puzzling as he played such a stoic role.

You set the table well here, but in the interest of moving the action I felt the setting was abandoned a bit after the jump. It was still clear what was going on, but you’re one of the very best at using metaphor and creativity to immerse a reader in the story; it felt like you just touched on that note here.

Character: 20/30

You’re as strong as any writer here in depicting action, to the point where I feel like I’m learning more about hand to hand combat as a reader. It’s really a treat to read, and I’m glad the thread had plenty of fighting to soak up here as a reader.

The communication and persona of your characters was little softer here. I was really unsure as to why you play Cronen as cold-blooded as you do here. You showcase your own personal sense of humor and ability to display emotion with Stacia, but leave Breaker as an emotionless monolith for the majority of the thread. Most of his dialogue is broken down into directives regarding fight instruction, which stands in contrast to Stacia’s snark, guile, and cleverness. I’ve seen you infuse a little more humanity into him before; it adds depth to the character that you loaded up for Stacia alone. Spread the wealth!


Prose: 26/30

You’re boring to edit here because you’re damned near flawless. I thought I found a typo with the word “rein”, because I was thinking of the word “reign”, meaning “to rule over”. I was wrong. Damnit.

I deducted a few points on technique that really could have been made up with a more ambitious thread. More significant metaphor or foreshadowing could have been deployed in a more sweeping arc. I’m not sure I could score someone higher than 26 in this category for a thread of this scope.

Wildcard: 8/10

I was a little generous here because I felt I may have been a bit stingy in the plot section. You’re a tremendous writer, and a joy to read. A more complex and layered thread would almost certainly have garnered a JC nomination. Well done!

Final Score: 69/100 (#nice)

The Sweetest Thing receives:

810 EXP!
110 GP!

Breaker receives:

1675 EXP!
100 GP!

[Shinsou Vaan Osiris]

All rewards have been added!