David Jasmine

[dustin]

Name: David Jasmine
Age: 22
Race: Devil-ken
Hair Color: Platunim
Eye Color: Jade
Height: 5'11''
Weight:225lbs
Occupation:Antique dealer/ merc

Personality: Cold spitfully sarcastic, and ruthlisly to the point...

Appearance: young and strong he whairs heavi red leather and is well groomed. Jasmine has 3 long thick clow marks runing across his chest in his humin state he has no suspect trates aside from ruff green scails running down the back of his neck.

Historyavid Jasmine's life has bin consumed by his tast for vingencs sencs 10 years ago win Mephistophils, a Notherworld lord, pared before him and his parints and sister at thair shop. Miphisto opend Jasmine's eyes to the dark world his father served and had hidden from his famly. Miphisto banished Jasmines father back to the Notherworld after a frutlis battle. his sister was upducted and mother slayin with a singal swip of Miphisto's tails. Miphisto throw the Jasmine famly sword to the young David Jasmine and exsplaind to him that his Father was a Hellknight of the highest order, and that his soul belongs to the pitlords. Miphisto sead he would retern soon to see if Jasmine was ready to continue his fathers work. Miphisto made his leave. Jasmine was left in the runes of the Antique shop.

Jasmine took up the tools and wepoins left for him, a crossbow, a longsword, and a jade neckiliss. hellfire in his eyes Jasmine began looking for the secrits of thise world and the adjacent worlds, starting with the strange and tarible atrifacts of his own home. for ten years he has restlissly studded his sword and the books on the dark arts he was left so win Miphisto reternd he can fight him with his own darkpowers.

Skills: Europine sword art, Deminoligy, aprasiry, acrobatics, Can go full demon. (Because of a fear of what he might do in this form, he has suppressed his power and cannot go into his demon form willingly. It only happens in times of extreme stress and desperation)
(Demon form only) -Super humin stranght- -improved HP/ shock absorb-
-Hellfire blast: after chaniling energy for 3 uninterupted minutes create a riseing fire blast to inflicet hevie dmg opin targits in a 15' radeis around and 30' above caster. (has knolige of spell but insificent energy to cast at this time)

Equipment: Tanned red leather armore, arlum sword, jade neckilss, hand crossbow, 12 wood bults.

[Witchblade]

All right, well a few things...

What exactly is an 'arlum sword'? Is arlum a type of metal and if so, how strong is it? We only give level zero characters weapons and armour up to the strength of steel, so if it's more than that you'll have to change it.

In his demon form, there is no point saying that he has improved HP as this isn't a videogame and characters don't have Hit Points here. His sword art can be at average skill or lower, his demonology knowledge needs to be further explained. What kind of knowledge does he have? You don't need to go into exact detail, just a quick description of what he knows. I don't even know what Aspasiry is, so you should make a small paragraph describing it. His acrobactics skill can be average or lower as well. He can have 1.5 times the normal human strength in his demon form.

The Hellfire blast is waaay too powerful. I don't care if it takes three minutes to channel and he can't use it yet. If he can't use it there really isn't a point of having it in the profile right now. I suggest you either get rid of it, or you take it down a lot. Take the 15ft down to 4ft and the 30ft down to 7ft.