~Theselak Rising.~

Seeing Cerna's reaction, Nosdyn smiles.

Kura sucks Nosdyn off and drinks his liquid hot seed. She dutifully swallows all of him.

Nosdyn is extremely hard at that point. He smiles and licked his lips at Kura but before that was done, he smiled at Kura. "Take my erection and put it in Cerna's mouth." He ordered of Kura.

She agreed and held his erection large and stiff with both hands. After she was done swallowing all of his see, she placed his large member inside of Cerna's throat. "Suck mother." Kura said with a soft smile.

Cerna chuckles and begins to do so skillfully. She was surprised to see her shy little girl taking charge

A few days later...

Lord Nosdyn observes Lady Y'Edda. He had a confused expression on his face. Lady Kura and Cerna stood by his side as per always. Nosdyn took a deep breath and walked right up to Lady Y'Edda. "My lady..." Nosdyn began. "I am troubled by a matter that never sat well with me."

Lady Y'Edda smiled and looked at Nosdyn calmly. "What troubles you Nosdyn?" She asked.

"When I gave Lord Cool my weapon something I did not expect happened within me." He said. "I changed somehow. I gave him more than just a weapon. I think I gave my desire to fight." He was confused by all of it.

She nodded. "When dealing with the Thaynehood. You will find contracts and agreements often are much more than they appear."

He nodded. At that point he looked at Cerna and Kura. Then he looked towards Lady Y'Edda and made his firm decision. He gave up and set aside his desire to destroy the thaynehood...instead.

Nosdyn knelt before Lady Y'Edda offering his services to her...

A choice N'Jal never gave him.

Cerna smiles at nosdyn and stands by his daughter. It was nice to see him put aside his personal rage and see the good in a being he once thought was an enemy. She too offered her services to lady y'edda but as she knelt to do so something happened that surprised the group. Cerna had gone into labor

Immediately, Nosdyn was by his wife's side. Reacting quickly, he picked her up and took her form to Lady Y'Edda's side. "She's with child my lady. Please help us." He begged their new sire.

Lady Y'Edda nodded and called High Priest Crux to their side.

They began the process of delivering Cerna and Nosdyn's child.

Nosdyn stood by his wife's side the entire time. His large arms folded across his bulging chest. He watched Crux and Lady Y'Edda work on his wife. A look of concern was etched on Nosdyn's face. He noticed the Lady Kura, their daughter was by his side as well.

With the healers working around the clock, the process took three full nights.

Soon Cerna and Nosdyn's daughter was born. Nosdyn looked at his beautiful daughter she would be half undead and half demon. A hybrid. He looked at Lady Y'Edda. "May I carry her my lady?" He asked.

She nodded and handed Nosdyn the child.

"Yuna." Nosdyn whispered her name. "Yuna Kortar."

Cerna was exhausted after the entire ordeal. But at the same time, She was glad the baby was born without incident. She watched her mate interact with the newborn and smiles At both of them tiredly

Nosdyn held their beautiful child in his large arms. The rage within, the storm in his eyes had been taken away to calm cinders, ashes of the fury they once held within. He held their child closely, his large arms wrapped firmly around the little one. He spoke to the little one gently, she was nuzzle her head against his beard.

He was standing right next to Cerna and Kura.

Crux was applying a few more spells upon Cerna, to assure her survival.

He held their child closely against his warm body. A short while later returning Yuna to her mother for feeding.

The sweet nectar of Cerna's breasts. Nosdyn himself often drank of it...

He sat down next to Kura he was also quite exhausted. He looked at Lady Y'Edda. "Than you for saving her."

Cerna smiles and nods at them as She fed and held her child "and thanks for the assist also crux. Again you had come to our aid"

Crux nodded gently to Cerna as she breast fed the little one.

Nosdyn approached her and ran his hand gently through her hair. He looked at Crux and Lady Y'Edda he had a calm expression on his face. Studious silently learning all he could. His hand gently running through his woman's hair. Nosdyn learned a truth that day, a huge truth about life and death. He narrowed his eyes thoughtfully and looked at the Thayne before him. "Undead are not barren as we once thought. The secret technique works in it's entirety." Nosdyn suddenly said.

Lady Y'Edda looked at him. "I know you must have many questions right now. But we will discuss this matter at length another time."

Nosdyn nodded. "Yes sire." He said calmly to her. He indeed had many questions about the situation at hand. He had no answers for what he needed answering for. In a few short hours, everything he thought he knew about life and death had been flipped on it's head. He considered the whole situation carefully. Undead could give them children. What would that mean? He thought to himself. He looked at his lovely Undead wife. His hand still massaging her hair softly. "Too many questions..." He sighed. "No answers, but the answers will come." His hand gently played with Cerna's hair. Their daughter, Yuna, rested softly as she drank from Cerna's large breast.

Nosdyn looked at Kura carefully. "Kura I have a job for you."

Kura nodded and walked up to her sire. "Yes my lord what do you need?"

Nosdyn handed Kura a letter. "Give this to my son."

Cerna looks at Kura "and take Fang. He's a playful bat. But he knows his way around. He'll lead you to him" she instructed as Fang flew to her

Kura nodded towards her parents and went on her way.

Nosdyn, deep in thought looked at Crux. "Can I take my wife home now?" He asked Crux.

"Yes Nosdyn she should be good now." Crux explained.

Nosdyn nodded. "Sorry to keep you here extra time after the wedding Crux."

The priest nodded. "It's all right I like it here anyway." He was spending a lot of time with Lady Xelldra. "Besides, I've become quite close to Lady Xelldra."

Nosdyn chuckled. "She will treat you well." He promised Crux. At that point, Nosdyn picked up his wife and their child and took her home...

Cerna smiles softly as she held their new child. She again thanked Crux as they departed and leaned into Nosdyn

Nosdyn at that point is only concerned with the well being of his woman and their child.

He carries them both to their home and takes them upstairs. He held his family in his large arms. Massaging her close, wrapping his woman in his great cloak to keep her warm and protected. He was being as careful as possible. One they were in the master bedroom, he placed his family on their bed. He gently kissed the top of his woman's head.

He wrapped the bed sheets around the two of them. "Rest loves." He said to them gently. "I'll go make us some food..."

Cerna nods and rests as Yuna suckled on her breast still feeding. She was exhausted after the birth of their young one

A short while later, Nosdyn readies the dinner in the kitchen area of their large house.

At some point during that situation, Kura returned from her errand with their bat, Fang, in tow.

She walked over towards the kitchen, kisses her Lord Nosdyn, hugs him and smiles. "My lord. I gave Tharak the letter." She said.

He nodded gently. "Come Kura, help me gather this food for Lady Cerna." He ordered.

She nodded and assisted Lord Nosdyn. They both gathered a large amount of food for themselves and went upstairs to Lady Cerna and their daughter, Yuna. Nosdyn placed the food quietly on their bed and kissed Kura deeply for a moment in thanks going back to Lady Cerna's side. He pulled Kura with them in their bed gently with a chuckle. Nosdyn's appetite knew no limits...

Cerna smiles as Fang eagerly pulls on Cerna's horn. This woke her but she knew it was only her bat

Lady Kura, their daughter, had placed Fang gently on Cerna. The large bat had proved a loyal and useful ally.

Nosdyn and Kura brought everyone plenty of food.

The food was placed in between everyone gently and he looked at Cerna in the eyes with a soft expression on his face. Notably, the storm and rage in Nosdyn's eyes was gone and replaced with something far more human in nature. It would due very well in tandem with the point that he was now a proud father of two daughters. He kissed Kura deeply in front of his wife. He was a demon, and they held largely open relationships with one another. He then proceeded to kiss Cerna deeply as well.

Smiling softly he hungered for his tow women. But his appetite would wait until Yuna was asleep. He massaged his woman Cerna softly. He fed her himself. Also feeding Kura gently. There was a gentle nature to the demon that had not been there before. The pact he made Lord Cool had changed him considerably. He took off his clothing, Kura's and his wife's so they would all be comfortable.

"Much better." He said gently admiring his two naked women...

Cerna smiles softly and looks at him and Kura softly "Kura Fang didn't give you any trouble did he? He can be a prankster at times"

Later that month...

Lady Kura sees the parcel that arrived from Lord Cool himself.

She picked up the package in silence and handed it over to Lord Nosdyn. Her father and her lover.

She knelt before the demon and gave him the package.

In thanks, Nosdyn hugged Lady Kura once he undid the package. His weapon, his prevalida mace was in the package along with a letter from Lord Cool and his acolytes. Nosdyn read the letter and nodded. That confirmed Lord Cool's destiny was entwined with Nosdyn's.

He looked at his two women.

He kissed Cerna deeply and then the Lady Kura.

Their daughter, Yuna was growing rapidly.

Nosdyn held his two women closely as he read the letter Lord Cool had given him and his people.

He knew at that point Lord Cool wished to be allies...

That would be a journey for another tomorrow.

Some of The Thaynehood could be trusted. Nosdyn held his two women and made love to them for many hours that day. He explained to Cerna and Kura what Lord Cool and Lady Y'Edda wanted. They wanted to be allies. Some of the Thayne could be trusted...

Nosdyn considered all of that very carefully...

~The End~

Cerna nods and picks up her lover's mace from the box and handed it to him "there is more to the Thayne then meets the eye. But I saw no malice in either Lady Y'edda or Lord Cool. Perhaps having them on our side will aid us in some manner"

She took her man and daughter for many hours that day. Their family was growing rapidly and Cerna had another surprise in store for the demon family

~End

~Theselak Rising.~

If either of you would like to have any further critique please reach out to me and I would be happy to help. I am also open to discussion if you would like to discuss the feedback. Otherwise, it was a pleasure to read this thread and give the following judgement. <3

Strengths

• Cerna - the opening post you wrote was very good! You put in some backstory, character, personality… just try and continue developing that and working it in. You can always put a little bit of personality, your setting, and things like that into your posts.
• Cerna - It was interesting to see you had a new storyline with the kid taken by the Thayne and used that to work it into the story.
• Nos - you did a good job of trying to add more to the story in your posts with narrative and setting. There could have been a lot more, as it was almost non-existent, but your posts were a bit more full so added to the thread as a whole.

Weakness

• Mechanics: The writing style, of having multiple one line sentences separated, attempts to make a flow but makes it hard to follow more. I think a lot of those sentences could be elaborated on to fill in story and character!
• Try to be conscious of your tense. If you are writing in past tense (as things had happened) try to be mindful so you don’t write present tense (things are happening). It just makes the reader get caught off guard a little.
• There were a lot of general grammatical mistakes, missing punctuation and misused words or capitalization that was unnecessary.
• Why is Y’edda there in the thread? I understand you want to incorporate the Thayne in your story, but this didn’t make any sense. In your following posts you mentioned that she didn’t know she was in danger… she’s a Thayne (a god) what danger? - an additional aside, Lord Cool? That is like Freeza saga DBZ names that doesn’t fit.I literally don’t know how this character fits with anything at all…
• Story: Nos, towards the end when you start writing about having relations with not only Cerna but her daughter, together and at the same time… I get this is a mature thread, and I’m not judging, but it was not only out of place but was not written well to the point where I was, as a reader, cringing.

Stars

Overall, with the star system I would give this thread a 2/10

Rewards

Cerna - 320 exp | 50 gold

Nos - 1100 exp | 50 gold

Exp and GP added.

Nos is now level 9

Cerna is now level 3