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    Bregan [Famine]'s Avatar

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    Baron Coin Serfaret
    Age
    33
    Race
    Human/Risen Undead
    Gender
    Male
    Hair Color
    Black
    Eye Color
    Brilliant, brilliant green.
    Build
    5'11";170 lbs
    Job
    Baron/Ghost Fencer

    Pew pew pew!

    ((I submitted this character years ago, and really never got around to using him for more than two posts or so. I wanted to change around his image a little and made a few edits here and there, but the basic message is still the same. If I ought to just submit this as a new character, let me know.))


    Name: Coin Serfaret
    Age: 33
    Race: Human/Risen Undead
    Gender: Male
    Class: Baron/Ghost Fencer
    Height: 5'11"
    Weight: 170 lbs

    Physical Description: Coin stands at five feet and eleven inches tall, his body muscular and sleek in the way of a jungle cat. The man is a speed fighter, and one fully accustomed to using his body as a weapon in ways that others can't even begin to imagine. His eyes are a brilliant, otherworldly green, like radiation made liquid, pooled then stirred in a shallow gray ditch. His gaze is a difficult one to break away from by any man's standards, and it could really be best described as hungry; fey.

    His hair, black and ragged, is cut haphazardly at various lengths and, in general, rests against his shoulders lifelessly, which is extremely fitting all things considered. Because of his shaky connection with the world of the living -- like a man living just slightly out of tune with everything around him -- its state doesn't always reflect what it should. To be specific, it may well whip about when there is no wind, or lay still in the middle of a storm. His own hands; his own will can actively help to shape his look, allowing him some small advantage in certain social situations.

    Padded leather greaves cover the lower half of his body, the dusty brown bull-skin cracked and splitting in places from poor storage and a lack of care. Beneath them, black leather pants cover the rest of him, let out near the bottom to make room for his fencing boots. A bright red length of silk serves as a belt, tied off in a tight knot on one side of his hips, opposite his sword. His chest is covered by a sleeveless gray shirt worn under a dark vest. The man's right arm is firmly wrapped in black rags and a gauntlet, which cover the most visible mark of his return to the living world; nothing but bare bone can be found underneath, animate and quick and as hard as iron.

    Personality: The things that have brought Coin to where he is today have made him something of a serious person...but they've also served to turn him into something of a hedonist. Although not one by the purest definition of the word, the pleasures offered in this world -- in most any form -- are of interest to him. Drugs, drinking, and women: just a few of the things that he fancies. Hand in hand with this fervor, however, is an air of being somewhat unbalanced by exposure to the beyond: nowhere close to mad, but not rooted in traditional thought as much as he is not rooted in this world.

    And, needless to say, death or many of the world's horrors hold little terror for him.

    Skills:

    Ghost Fencing: Although his ties to the land of the dead and the spirit world (as well as the creatures that make such places their home) are all but useless for the time being, Coin is still in essence a ghost fencer. Innately beyond those mortals on his own loyly tier, it allows him a unique and deadly advantage against ordinary men. The strength of the grave flows through his splintered being -- not freely just yet, but a trickle of all the energies he previously held. His blows are stronger and faster than they ought to be -- at roughly twice the strength of a grown man.

    All the same, the talents of his former life shine through his fall and resurrection, allowing him noteworthy skill with a small variety of blades. Although not a master by any standard, his new body has proven to be quite adept at melee combat. Although he prefers smaller arms, he was given instruction in the basic form and function of other tools, such as large swords and maces.

    Deathlessness: Basic Knowledge: Fragmented knowledge of what is beyond the horizon; on the other side of the sky.

    Singing: Coin has a fine voice, and while it's hardly as enchanting as a professional, one can consider him a talented amateur.

    Equipment: Serfaret Guard Saber: Taken from the tombs of his family's ancient protectors before leaving the ruined estate with his brother, this is the simple fencing tool of a long-forgotten guard. Strong, but fairly unremarkable, Coin chose the blade for the simplicity thereof; trusted the lack of a higher nature within over that of his own sealed tools.

    Fencing Leathers: Oddly preserved against the passage of time, this durable, flexible armor is perfectly suited to a gentleman fencer.

    History:

    The House of Serfaret...a minor family in the grand scheme of things, but on which has an unfortunate tendancy to align themselves with justice. Giving birth to any number of fine swordsmen and jacks-of-blades, the close ties and trust of its family saw it through purges and strikes by greater groups who would move against such a stinging thorn. Drawing their riches from mining and timber, the Serfereti also maintained a fairly tenacious position as a noteworthy supplyer to mercantile organizations over a wide area.

    Their good lot, unfortunately, came to an end with the death of the Lord Baron Gishmael Serfaret, officially by illness; unofficially by poison.

    The weakness in the change of leadership to his oldest son, Coin, was a chance that many of the enemies of the family saw fit to take advantage of. In his inexperience, lands and treaties were lost or hemmed from what they had been by tactics that his sire had been all too familiar with. Few in his clan blamed him, though, for these failures...he would have ample time to learn from his mistakes, they imagined, and become stronger because of them. The idea that their opponents would stoop so low as to resort to outright murder was, at the time, unthinkable; even between enemies, there were supposed to be rules.

    How tragically wrong they proved to be.

    In an act of unpredicted brutality, a shadowy alliance of clans struck against Coin and his younger brother, Viktor, in the early summer. The more venerable and powerful members of both the guard and the family were spread across the network of the group's interests, leaving their manse nearly without defenses. The two-dozen soldiers stationed at the grounds fought like bloody tigers, but fell almost to a man against the odds. Perhaps six escaped from the fray with their lives, if that, and none have been heard from since.

    Viktor died at the gates, brought low by the portcullis and the sharp blades of the assassins. Selflessly and without thought for his own life, he dragged himself, torn and bleeding, through the halls of the mansion to warn his brother of the coming death, but was too late by far.

    Coin, cut and wounded from dozens of slashes, breathed his last in the throne room of the house, as the sword of the lithe hunter Hector Velius pierced his throat, pinning him to the wall beside the great chair. The fact that he had killed better than fifteen men was for nothing...all was for nothing.

    The brothers were dead; the Serferet were falling.

    Unable to rest after their violent deaths, both for the pain of the end and for the shame of their failure, the two rose as ghosts, to haunt the halls of their decaying manse as it became broken and wasted before their very eyes. Powerful as his demise had made him, though, he little more than a whisper in the world of the living...and what power did a whisper have to give rise to revenge?

    And so they made a plan...and made a pact.

    A pact most vile.

    Shedding their strength, Coin and Viktor gave rise to new life in their corpses; used their bitter lamentation to pierce the veil. Although imperfect and only a shadow of what they had been in either world, the brothers had returned, years later, to reclaim what had been stolen from them.
    Last edited by Bregan [Famine]; 08-19-09 at 12:28 AM.
    "The strangers in me are easily distracted. They are daydreamers, romantics. And therefore unreliable. They are often drunk and they don't always look out for each other. They pretend not to notice things. It always comes back to this business of drifting and I don't mean the way that clouds drift. The way shadows drift behind the sun. It's a geological thing, a tectonic shift. The drift is not so easily noticed, but the impact tends to be profound."

  2. #2
    The Three Ways
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    Logan McCloud
    Age
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    Human
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    Silver
    Eye Color
    Glacier Blue
    Build
    6'4" - 245 lbs.
    Job
    Manipulation of Your Mind

    I am going to move this into the Character Registration section, as that's where it should be (no biggie).

    A couple of minor things I'd like to see adjusted or changed a slight bit is his speed/strength combination. I don't mind him having both, and kind of could see where he'd have both, but I'd like you to find some way if possible to place some minor restriction on his use of it. Seeing as how it should be more an ability than just a trait or what-not.

    And I like the swordsman thing. It seems to have some real possibility, although I'd like to more or less know approximately where his ability stands. Noteworthy seems kinda bland to me, meaning anywhere above average. But maybe that's just me.
    Dying to himself, - Level 1/2
    Led to a new creation. Level 3
    The form remained - Level 4
    The foundation was rebuilt - Level 5
    The House rebuilt. - Level 6

    2015 - 1/2 of Adventurer's Crown Round 2 Guest Team w/ Max Dirks, Althy Day Superlatives: Character - Best Personality, Writer - Hardest Worker
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  3. #3
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    Bregan [Famine]'s Avatar

    Name
    Baron Coin Serfaret
    Age
    33
    Race
    Human/Risen Undead
    Gender
    Male
    Hair Color
    Black
    Eye Color
    Brilliant, brilliant green.
    Build
    5'11";170 lbs
    Job
    Baron/Ghost Fencer

    Quote Originally Posted by Logan View Post
    I am going to move this into the Character Registration section, as that's where it should be (no biggie).

    A couple of minor things I'd like to see adjusted or changed a slight bit is his speed/strength combination. I don't mind him having both, and kind of could see where he'd have both, but I'd like you to find some way if possible to place some minor restriction on his use of it. Seeing as how it should be more an ability than just a trait or what-not.
    I wasn't really meaning superhuman speed or anything, but I can just tone that down to 'hey, he's agile, because he's a fencer essentially, and has no reason not to be.' It'll be something I'll include in a later update, of course, but I don't mind being without it for now in the slightest.

    Would you still want a noted restriction/penalty on strength in that case?

    And I like the swordsman thing. It seems to have some real possibility, although I'd like to more or less know approximately where his ability stands. Noteworthy seems kinda bland to me, meaning anywhere above average. But maybe that's just me.
    Right now? Nothing too radical. Since you start out a lot lower in terms of power than I'm used to on this forum, I guess it's more about what it'll get to be than what it is right now. His connection to the afterlife is pretty slim at the moment, so being stronger than he ought to can be the extent of it, though I'd love to really work in channeling that power -- and, as it goes, spirits themselves -- through his body and weaponry.

    As far as the noteworthy, I'll agree with you: it IS a pretty bland word. When I originally had this looked at, if memory serves, people were wary of letting him through just mainly on the basis that he's undead. I really don't know the rough range of talent a guy is allowed to have when he's starting out, in terms of melee combat, and considering these other factors and such. But suffice to say, I'd go with 'not exactly a grandmaster champion warlord of arms by any standard, but he can perform quite well.'

    I just had this really fleeting urge to compare him to the Dread Pirate Roberts. No idea why.
    "The strangers in me are easily distracted. They are daydreamers, romantics. And therefore unreliable. They are often drunk and they don't always look out for each other. They pretend not to notice things. It always comes back to this business of drifting and I don't mean the way that clouds drift. The way shadows drift behind the sun. It's a geological thing, a tectonic shift. The drift is not so easily noticed, but the impact tends to be profound."

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    The Three Ways
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    Logan's Avatar

    Name
    Logan McCloud
    Age
    30
    Race
    Human
    Gender
    Male
    Hair Color
    Silver
    Eye Color
    Glacier Blue
    Build
    6'4" - 245 lbs.
    Job
    Manipulation of Your Mind

    Lol. Dread Pirate Roberts. Priceless (Princess Bride = My Favorite Movie EVER!)

    INCONCEIVABLE!

    How about he's "quite adept but not nearly masterful (yet)" at swordplay when channeling the drips of the spirits and the like?

    And as for the strength, we could say it's enhanced at around that of twice the ordinary man. That way we have some kind of gauge for his actual strength threshold for now.


    And yeah, I love the concept of the weapons and channeling of the spirits. It just rocks.
    Dying to himself, - Level 1/2
    Led to a new creation. Level 3
    The form remained - Level 4
    The foundation was rebuilt - Level 5
    The House rebuilt. - Level 6

    2015 - 1/2 of Adventurer's Crown Round 2 Guest Team w/ Max Dirks, Althy Day Superlatives: Character - Best Personality, Writer - Hardest Worker
    2016 - 1/2 of Best IC Partners w/ Max Dirks, Mr. Althanas

    {Record keeping for me: A Talymer longbow with 40 enchanted arrows purchased here,
    a box of cakes/muffins given here,
    Fools Rush In earned here,
    Dreamer's Helm earned here,
    Might of Moxxilus earned here,
    Sloth purchased here.
    }

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    Bregan [Famine]'s Avatar

    Name
    Baron Coin Serfaret
    Age
    33
    Race
    Human/Risen Undead
    Gender
    Male
    Hair Color
    Black
    Eye Color
    Brilliant, brilliant green.
    Build
    5'11";170 lbs
    Job
    Baron/Ghost Fencer

    Changed made. Hopefully that looks alright now.
    "The strangers in me are easily distracted. They are daydreamers, romantics. And therefore unreliable. They are often drunk and they don't always look out for each other. They pretend not to notice things. It always comes back to this business of drifting and I don't mean the way that clouds drift. The way shadows drift behind the sun. It's a geological thing, a tectonic shift. The drift is not so easily noticed, but the impact tends to be profound."

  6. #6
    The Three Ways
    EXP: 42,532, Level: 8
    Level completed: 84%, EXP required for next level: 1,468
    Level completed: 84%,
    EXP required for next level: 1,468
    GP
    2,265
    Logan's Avatar

    Name
    Logan McCloud
    Age
    30
    Race
    Human
    Gender
    Male
    Hair Color
    Silver
    Eye Color
    Glacier Blue
    Build
    6'4" - 245 lbs.
    Job
    Manipulation of Your Mind

    Yeah, looks good. APPROVED.
    Dying to himself, - Level 1/2
    Led to a new creation. Level 3
    The form remained - Level 4
    The foundation was rebuilt - Level 5
    The House rebuilt. - Level 6

    2015 - 1/2 of Adventurer's Crown Round 2 Guest Team w/ Max Dirks, Althy Day Superlatives: Character - Best Personality, Writer - Hardest Worker
    2016 - 1/2 of Best IC Partners w/ Max Dirks, Mr. Althanas

    {Record keeping for me: A Talymer longbow with 40 enchanted arrows purchased here,
    a box of cakes/muffins given here,
    Fools Rush In earned here,
    Dreamer's Helm earned here,
    Might of Moxxilus earned here,
    Sloth purchased here.
    }

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