Irrakam Infiltration - Vaahnzerekh's Tale Judgement
Herald of the Storm

Plot Construction ~ 16/30

Story ~ 6/10 -
Strategy ~ 5/10 -
Setting ~ 5/10 -

Characterisation ~ 20/30

Continuity ~ 6/10 -
Interaction ~ 7/10 -
Character ~ 7/10 -

Writing Style ~ 20/30

Creativity ~ 6/10 -
Mechanics ~ 7/10 -
Clarity ~ 7/10 -

Wildcard: 6/10

Total ~ 62/100
Though light commentary was requested, I found a lot of the same comments made in Darkness on the Horizon to be relevant here, too. One would assume this is because you both wrote these little solid vignettes of the Herald's entrance into Althanas at the same time, or close together. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to get in touch. I really enjoyed the conversation and dialogue between your characters and the guardsmen, you have, once again, a solid grasp of who, but a weak show of where.

Spoils:

Herald of the Storm gains 620 xp and 250 gold.