Memories of trees - The tale of a forgotten race.

[Kially Gaith]

Quickly, the temple dried the given steps as to protect the boy from falling. Curiosity had the boy carefully climb along, hugging against the wall as not to misplace a foot.

The waterfall water was pure and clean, gushing to the pool below where, even in the presence of the caverns occupants, spawned small fish and living creatures, forming out of the molecules within the water.

As the lad reached the peak of the water, Kially reached out and took hold of the ball in his left hand, unbeknownst of its’ purpose or use.
With a few seconds of grip, the ball slowly radiated fluorescent blue energy which ran up the child’s arm, across his torso and down his right arm. The energy was warm, fluid and oozed an aura of protection. When the ether had travelled its’ course, a large bright light signified the glorious entrance of blue and gold armour, as light and thin as cloth but as durable as steel.. The entourage consisted of basic solid shoulder pads that covered the end of his arms, a rounded chest plate and a simplistic helmet that protected the back, top and sides of his head, All were bright blue and gold, giving off a prevalence of both power and magnificence.

Kially seemed confused, but the goddess resident of the temple planned that if the boy was not to fight, he may as well be protected in the instances that he would fight. As the child admired the armour, he began his descent down the makeshift flight of stairs, on reaching the bottom step, the armour glowed a bright white light, burst into shards of blue and gold glass shaped like feathers which floated towards the floor, dissipating before reaching it.

Kially stood, bemused by the sudden show, once again holding the ball. Opening his hand, the ball slowly sank into his palm, disappearing altogether without a bright show of energy.
A sudden look flew to Luc, his alone, obviously requesting some sort of explanation which even Kially did not believe he had.

[Cyrus the virus]

Luc watched silently in interest, Kially donning and shedding a magnificent, radiant armor in the span of a few moments. The small ball had magical properties that were rare in the world of Althanas, but certainly were not out of the question for a goddess. These Naturians were on to something, he knew.

Still, he could offer no concrete name or description for Kially, who looked to him in anticipation. "I've seen items such as this before," he mused, pulling the tome against his stomach with crossed hands. "I encountered a man in the Citadel once who had an item like this. It could change into whichever weapon he desired. In his hands it was limited, for he lacked the necessary skill to wield such an item. You can learn to be better than him, though."

He grinned at that. With Luc's guidance and Kially's own innate powers, the boy could be forged into a powerful ally. "Imagine. Magic at your fingertips, and armor to protect you. A very valuable gift, your goddess gives."

Careful to protect his thoughts, which already drifted toward prying Kially's beliefs away from the goddess and her Naturian, peaceful ways, Luc beckoned to the lad. "Let's leave, then. I imagine it's growing late, and I've errands to run come the morning."

[Kially Gaith]

Kially and his innocence quickly had his mind distracted by the waterfall, the clear liquid reminding him that food, water and sleep were largely necessary. The child now stood quietly before Luc, trying to decide just what to do and where the exit was.

Sensing her followers need for sustenance, the goddess of the Temple quietly opened another portal for the two above the pool, forming glass steps up to it with her omnipotence.

Kially would grin a playful smile, allowing a show of his innocence. “Thankoo.”
A pointed finger would point out the location of the portal, as if Luc hadn’t suddenly spotted a sudden glowing red sphere appear out of nowhere with the manners and prevalence of a mountain troll.

Looking to Luc, he scuttled over to that of the pool and moved his mouth to the water, lapping some up like an eager puppy with his dainty tongue. Kially found it to be rather refreshing, soothing and delectable. Followed was a quick splash of water onto his own face as to revitalise himself.

With silence held within the boy, Kially knelt once again, closed his eyes and cupped his hands, a circular hole between his hands, symbolising the planet, this shape was placed to his forehead as he thought out his prayer of thanks which his Goddess quietly accepted.

When prayer finally came to a finish, Kially said not a word, quiet gait moving up the crystalline steps above the fluid below him, easing his body slowly into the red glowing orb. Like earlier, Kially disappeared, a fizzle of energy sparking into the air, announcing his leaving.

Spoils Request - Star of Memories: A blue and white marble made from compressed memories and energy. Currently grants Kially a blue and gold chest plate that's feather light with the durability of steel. Will level up and become more durable and cover more parts of his body with each level.

[Cyrus the virus]

Luc observed quietly as his earthen steps sunk back to the ground, replaced by a crystal staircase which led up and over the center of the pool. Bright red light pierced the clear structure, but reflected in such a way that the steps were obvious. The power to create matter from thin air was one that intrigued the mage, but it was one of many things that would have to wait. His current project, after all, would take some time.

He watched Kially closely. The boy was like a typical human child, bending down into the dirt to splash water haphazardly all over himself. Luc suspected Kially could have beckoned the water up to him, in a similar way that he could, but simply didn't think of it. Luc needed to teach the boy that he needn't dirty himself like the typical rabble.

All the same, he followed up the crystal staircase, followed into the red sphere which served as a portal, sucking them in. The moment he did so, the portal and the staircase vanished, leaving the serene underground temple the way they had found it. Empty.

Seconds of confusing travel followed, as the two were dragged through space itself to return to the world Luc knew well. They were spat out onto dry soil, patches of grass about them in the places where plantlife lived.

A wondrous hum came from him, then. The trees were taller than any in all of Corone, with blood-red bark and crimson leaves. The ground itself was red, as if stained with the fallen bodies of many men. He didn't know it, but they had reappeared in the Red Forest of Raiaera, one of the most fearsome places in all of Althanas. For now, it was peaceful.

Through the trees, Luc could see a large lake of water. Though the sky was orange with the promise of looming nightfall, they had some time to eat and wash up. Windwalk needed to recharge, which required a night of rest from the mage. Pointing to the nearby lake, Luc swiftly unfastened his cape.

"Wash up, Kially. I'll prepare us food and a place to sleep. We must rest here for the night."

Without waiting for a response, Luc unsheathed a portion of the Slykrit Blade and created a burning flame in his hand. Using his other hand to create a small hole in the ground and fill it with fallen branches, he created a healthy fire.

Sitting and removing his gloves, Luc chanted an ancient incantation in the Slavarian Forgotten Tongue, opening a small portal by his side from which food and drink began to spawn.

((Spoil: A tome containing a description and history of a particularly powerful spell. Learning the spell requires much time and study in a language Luc does not fully understand yet, along with other conditions. Basically, it's a book.))

[Breaker]

Memories of trees- the tale of a forgotten race
Quest Judgement

Alright, you guys just asked for a few comments, so here they are.

Even though this thread continued from another, and is a prequel to your next one, I still would have liked a little more backstory. As far as I could see, the only reason this thread happened was that you guys wanted some EXP and new stuff.

I think for the most part you two both know what this thread is missing, so I’ll keep this brief.

Kially, your descriptions of things are patchy, and they don’t do the greatest job of helping me imagine where your character is and what he’s doing. Work on using literary devices, and when you’re editing try reading your posts out loud to yourself. You have a lot of word order errors and run on sentences that this should help eliminate. Also, have more fun with your character. The bit where he named the gemstones and lapped from the pool was neat, but I need more from you.

Cyrus, you’re a great writer, so most of your work in this thread was good without being fantastic. Try incorporating some more literary devices, and focus a little more on Luc’s motivation to make his character shine through more. And now the numbers.


STORY

Continuity ~ 5/10.
Setting ~ 5.5/10.
Pacing ~ 4/10.

CHARACTER

Dialogue ~ 5/10.
Action ~ 6/10.
Persona ~ 5.5/10.

WRITING STYLE

Technique ~ 5/10.
Mechanics ~ 7/10.
Clarity ~ 7/10.

MISCELLANEOUS

Wild Card ~ 4/10.

TOTAL ~ 54/100. Nothing really happened in this thread, and I found it pretty boring. Despite that, the writing was mostly solid. Congratulations!

EXP Rewards

Kially Gaith receives 420 EXP!
Cyrus the Virus receives 2023 EXP!

GP Rewards

Kially Gaith receives 100 GP!
Cyrus the Virus receives 100 GP!

Other Rewards

Cyrus the Virus receives his requested spoil, under the condition that he must learn the language in the tome in a separate quest before learning the spell subsequently. This is due to the complex nature of the language and the particular power of the spell.

Kially Gaith receives the Star of Memories, however it is not as powerful as he at first thought. It grants Kially a heart plate that is feather light and has the durability of steel when it comes to slashing/puncturing attacks. However, it is no more protective than wool against blunt force trauma. The heart plate will not grow more durable as he levels up, however, when Kially reaches level 2 it will grow into a chest plate. If you wish for it to become stronger you must earn upgrades in quests or seek stronger enchantments at the bazaar.

[Witchblade]

EXP and GP added!