This was close. A few times you both inadvertently repeated each other's descriptions (the comments about Sorahn's muscles come to mind). Be weary of this because it makes the battle redundant.
Karuka Tida (Cipher Nex)
Continuity (3/10) Your character began battle ready, jumped to being honored to fight Sorahn, then had an apparent distaste for him and battling in general with little transition. This probably hurt you the most.
Setting (4/10)
Pacing (3/10)
Dialog (4/10)
Action (3/10)
Persona (3/10)
Mechanics (6/10)
Technique (5/10) I admire your style. Its been a long time since someone has used first person in present tense. This would have been MUCH higher, but there were many times when you slipped into past tense (or vice versa).
Clarity (6/10)
Wild Card (2/10) Late posts. Also, some of the comments you made, such as "Why does everyone on Althanas have some sort of magic or other? Back on Earth, we got along just fine without it..." seemed like underhanded shots at Sorahn for things you didn't like in the battle. It was very inconsistent with what your character felt at first.
Total (39/100)
Sorahn (Red Hand)
Continuity (4/10) I wish you would have stuck with the story you built at the beginning.
Setting (3/10)
Pacing (3/10)
Dialog (4/10)
Action (3/10)
Persona (3/10)
Mechanics (6/10)
Technique (5/10)
Clarity (6/10)
Wild Card (3/10) Late posts.
Total (40/100)
Sorahn wins. No rewards, though.