I've added the links to your registration to help judges in later rounds:

http://www.althanas.com/world/showth...7835--Alucroas
http://www.althanas.com/world/showth...t=17992--Wyren

Judgment:

Story 2.4/5 ((I had to modify this category slightly to account for your styles in your registration. You both provided appropriate introductions, but the real goal of the trial was to produce interaction between the characters, which is why I cannot afford to give you a perfect score. Alucross, my only qualm with your introduction was the last two sentences where you utilized a form of omnipresent writing that wasn't established earlier in the post. It's fine to tell the story as you planned, but be consistent with it.))

Character 2.8/5 ((The best part, obviously. Alucroas' 1st person allowed the introduction of slang into the prose which made it easy to establish character. Wyren's hunger and an underlying feeling that he may ultimately reject it established his character well. However, without interaction I am not able to judge you on all aspects of character--namely action.))

Writing Style: 2.6/5 ((Alucroas, you are a very gifted writer. Your varied sentence structure added the necessary accentuation of your character's backstory. When you wanted it to be fast paced you used shorter sentences, etc. However, you began the thread in a distinct 2nd person (almost choose your own adventure style) and then changed to a 1st person style without an appropriate transition. It is fine to use a unique style in the tournament but you absolutely must be consistent with it. Wyren, you have great descriptions, but you misuse commas. To a reader a comma represents a pause in the writing and several times when I paused the pacing of your writing fell out of place. Each "that" or "which" does not require a comma! Avoid run-ons and I feel you will do well.))

7.8/15 or 52/100