Alright, here is your basic judgment, sirs. To cut down on frills, I'll omit commentary. If you'd like me to give you specifics or helpful advice, just PM me.
Story: 4
Setting: 4
Pacing: 3
Communication: 5
Action: 4
Persona: 5
Mechanics: 4
Clarity: 3
Technique: 4
Wildcard: 4 You guys clearly rushed through this. You had the opportunity to tell a story and show off your characters' skills and intentions, and further develop them; the problem is, you didn't jump at the opportunity. Make sure to write in what your character feels, what they think, and how they express themselves. Everything is an essence, and your job as a writer is to harness that essence and craft a story. You can do it.
Final Score: 40
The Inventor receives 261 Exp, 5 Gold and 3 pieces of Bronze Ore.
Fox Owen Xavier receives 293 Exp and 30 Gold.
11 Gold will be sent to The Trading Company bank. (1 from the Inventor, 10 from Fox)
To both of you: unfortunately, some requested spoils were not available for reward because you did not score high enough. Better luck next time!
Fox, since you did write out the creation of your potion, you can have knowledge of how to craft it for later use at no charge.
Congratulations!
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