Sorry this took so long. I'm going to keep this short, but if you have any questions, I'll be happy to answer them regarding my commentary.

Pros
1. It's rare that we see the home lives of the characters of Althanas, so I thought it was interesting that we would see Nosdyn's while he was working on nation building. It was an interesting look into the lives of the Tular Plainsfolk and into how Nosdyn handles his position of leadership.
2. I can tell you're ramping up to something. There's a plan here, and I look forward to seeing what that turns out to be.
3. A lot of work went into reviving the Tular Plains, and there's going to be a lot more to come I'm sure. Following in the steps of Zieg is a interesting choice and I wish you and Nosdyn the best of luck.

Cons
1. Tense agreement issues were especially prevalent in this story. You jumped from present to past tense seemingly on a whim. Your consistency in this area needs a great deal of work, and I would highly suggest going back through after you edit for content to make sure that these issues are addressed before submitting for judgment, as they can make the meaning of your posts get lost in the grammatical errors.
2. Nosdyn faced zero actual difficulty. What I mean to say is you wrote him as being so strong that nothing that went "wrong" during your thread felt like much of an obstacle. Nosdyn was able to effortlessly power his way through it, intimidate, or physically force people to agree to his way of thinking. This detracted from any real sense of stake in the thread. Essentially there was very little in the way of drama because it felt like nothing could really affect him.
3. You use the "son of" saying a lot during your threads. While not necessarily an error, the fact that you repeat names and lineages so much can be distracting and a bit repetitive. I'd try to limit using that particular phrasing to once a thread, maybe more if the character ends up introducing themselves to total strangers more than once during a post.

Overall this thread gets the score in our new rating system of 6/10 stars.

Nosdyn receives 2304 EXP and 500 GP