Thank you both for submitting this thread for judgment!

I want to start by making some opening comments.

You originally asked for a full rubric judgment, but I declined this for one reason. This type of thread is an unusual one for Althanas. It harks back to the days of short, but fun, “burst RP” posting where there is less focus on quality and more on progression and involvement. It would be grossly unfair to weigh up a thread like this against an average Althanas thread, but at the same time there are some “basics” that need addressing and therefore as a compromise I’ve decided to score five stars out of ten (with 7 stars representing an “average” thread). This sort of equates to about a 30-40 on the old scoring scale.

On these types of judgments, I try to give three pros and cons. Due to the nature of this thread, it’s going to be abridged.

Pros

• It was fun for you guys to write. That should be the main goal of every thread on Althanas. Burst posting is rare these days, but it achieved at least this aim.
• It contained (relatively speaking) some character development, which is always a good thing on Althanas.
• There was a framework of a plot. Even if it needed expanding on, the thread wasn’t wasted in this regard.

Cons

• Posts were way, way, way too short for Cerna to be able to really learn about her environment and character. Some posts were a sentence long, which is nowhere near enough to be able to discern anything of any value.
• Nosdyn’s posts often contained repetition to the n’th degree. It’s always better to try to find different ways to describe the same things in a post.
• Too much dialogue, not enough action.


Final score: *****

Rewards:

Cerna receives 1,177 EXP, 150 GP and a hide cloak.

Nosdyn receives 1,132 EXP and 168 GP