All right rev lets do this!

This thread reminds me heavily of the princess bride. The move not the book where the story is being told to Fred Savage with the main main characters being fictitious and the "real" people are secondary or just an audience to the story. I like that technique I don't know what its called but I like it. It draws the reader in and makes the main character a proxy for the reader. I think its fantastic, you use your character to ask questions that the reader may ask.

If I had a complaint and if you've read any of my other Workshops you know that I don't have many! Is that a few of your posts are short. I'm not saying that every post needs a wall of words hell that's a worse circumstance than posts that are too short. I feel a little hypocritical for saying this but I've gotta complain about something right? Any way some of your posts could really have been combined into a comfortable lump of words.

I love lore and this thread is nothing but lore. Are you going to submit it as a wiki thing later on? At any rate it is a very good thread. I can't find any thing wrong with your grammar, your dialogue is great and I don't see any problems with the prose. Good job!