Ashla, that is really good

I love the way you write, it adds some really great feeling and sense of environment into your writing. I'm excited more about our battle now. Similies and metaphors are always good, they help bring a place, person or thing to life. The guideline for clauses was just to help try to curb your writing as you mentioned might enjoy a focus for you. Run-on sentences, especially in description, can be a great tool. You should never over use them though. Maybe one or two in a lengthy paragraph.