Burd
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Burd
Thanks, Phi.
I echo Rev’s well-wishes.
<3
“That’s the plan,” I responded.
I watched quizzically as Murov lost his mind in the snow. “What’s the problem?” I demanded. He offered nothing in response. I didn’t know if it was pain from...
“We’ll follow, horse,” William answered curtly.
The gleaming horse bowed its head in acknowledgement. “A wise decision. The master will be pleased that his guests are beings of reason. This...
“I can use many elements,” I proclaimed proudly. “Not just fire.”
Then I fell silent, listening to the snow crunching beneath my feet as I mulled the offer. I had no qualms about teaching Ezra;...
I returned Ezra’s glance with one of ice.
I’m not a person who gives up control lightly. I handed the reins to Murov because I had little choice, but I was aware of the risks. He could get us...
Ezra played along. I was grateful for that.
I collected the knife from the snow, wiping it clean on my tunic. Then my gaze settled back on my prey. I decided to try once more to do this the...
Nearby a bird shrieked, a cross between crow and banshee.
Life waged an eternal war against death. The air hung hot and wet, a sharp contrast from the chill that filled the valley they had just...
A little later than I anticipated on this. Sorry; some things came up.
Plot
This was a simple story: Fenn visits a cursed house to find a book, encountering some trouble along the way. And...
Plot
Setting is easily the strongest aspect of your writing. You do well to give me a consistent, clear mental of image of the world around you throughout the entire thread. On the other hand,...
“Good idea.” I was grateful for the rest. We set the unconscious priest up against the fallen tree. I took a moment to stretch, mulling over Ezra’s tale as I did.
I found the story as odd as...
I wasn’t having a fun time. Ezra was nearly a foot shorter than me, so I had to stoop as we dragged our charge through the Salvaran forest. My back ached already. The sleeve of my beige shirt felt...
Without a word, I turned my back. I needed a minute.
I had hoped Wheezy would be useful to me. He was a bad mage-hunter, but he was a mage-hunter nonetheless. I had come to Salvar looking for...
I could feel my temperature rising at every word out of Ezra’s mouth; at the end of the rant, I was pretty sure my breath had turned from steam to smoke. We were going to get along great.
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Civilization, Age of Empires, Total War. Those are some of my favorite PC franchises.
Tales of Maj'Eyal is a roguelike game into which I've sunk a ton of hours. Roguelikes are a niche genre, but...
I’d have dodged it, of course.
But when a second shield shimmered in front of me and deflected the ray of light, I wasn’t sure which annoyed me more: that I hadn’t noticed this new arrival, or...
So I’m a little wary of doing my usual mechanics comb-through with you because I’m admittedly hazy on the finer details of the differences between our respective flavors of the English language. ...
It wasn’t my fault!
I had been relaxing in a small village tavern with a cold pint, chatting up a nice Salvaran lass and otherwise minding my own business. It was shaping up to be a pretty...
I do.
No, I don't. Speaking personally, the site has always been about community first and storytelling a distant second (I spend a lot more time shooting the shit with people in chat than I do writing;...
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A very minor nitpick: “He stood over his latest project with his arms outstretched, an intricately carved oak mantle held in taut suspension over an equally intricate set piece.†I...
I can support the idea of raising the ‘Basic Judgment’ benchmarks to 50/60/70 to make it a relevant choice, but I’d like to see the Workshop score remain at 65. It’s that high for a reason.
The...
The finger of acid traced another symbol onto bone; numerous others glistened around him in a three-quarter circle. Languid eyes crawled to the next location, and his volatile paintbrush dutifully...
Whose character would be most fun to hang out with IRL?